The Awakening

The Awakening

A Chapter by KeeD

The year is 2213 and the Earth is depleting. Exhausting it's last few resources the remaining humans on this almost desolate planet need a ticket out of here. Most of the Earth's inhabitants have migrated to Alasus, the new home for humanity. Alasus is a planet created from different sorts of metals and advanced technology. Sera'eclipsion the dominant planet in the federation of galaxies has control over this corner of the universe. It controls the trade, the law and the will of the universe. No planet dares cross the Sera's or face complete annihilation. The Earth is now used as a dumping ground of waste, hub for criminal activity and is a far cry from the planet it once was. The few living humans that do still stay on earth have to provide sufficient resources to the Eclipsionion government in order to get a ticket to Alasus. Our story begins on Earth.
The skies are dark, Jordan walks the streets of this city, he's weak, out of his senses. Tremors kicking in, symptoms of the first stages of withdrawal. He can't walk any more, falling to the ground, he lays his back against a lamp post. The chill of the night causes shivers as his eyes shut close for a moment, dreaming about her face, her deep blue eyes, breathing heavily he sighs, "Alice...." eyes open again. Jordan pulls out a kit from his pant pocket, opens it up and pull out a needle. Hitting it against his wrist twice, the needle pierces his skin as the liquid pours into his veins, injecting Rust into his system. Rust is a new age addictive metallic drug sold by the Sera's to every other planet in order to keep monopoly over their economies. The drug is extremely addictive and comes with a variety of side effects. Jordan now intoxicated with the chemicals taking over his consciousness looks up at the lamp post, the light reflecting on his eyes, he's out cold. (sfx) "wsshh tsshh" entire body starts to shake as he mumbles in his sleep.

Jordan walks down 22nd street, the same road he grew up on, and lived his normal years on earth, the place where his house was situated. Passing by his house he see's his wife and child playing through the living room window. They look happy, everything is so peaceful. Jordan walks away from his house now thinking to himself how happy his family is, he misses them. He walks ahead to his best friend Paul's house.He notices Paul painting his front door. Starts to yell out, "Hey Paul!" there's no reply. Paul doesn't even notice him. Without wasting a second Jordan runs up to Paul and apologizes,"i'm sorry for hurting you, hurting everyone that loved and cared about me". Paul smiles and looks over Jordan's shoulder. Turning his head around he notices Alice and Nero his little boy walking towards Paul. "Hey baby" said Alice followed by a kiss on Paul's lips as they walked towards his car. Jordan screams, "Why?" as he falls to the floor devastated, covered in tears. His eye's shut only to awaken near the same lamp post he passed out under. 

Recovering from his vivid dream, his fix wearing thin, he gets up on his feet and starts walking the streets of the city, aimlessly. The entire world covered with trash and used waste, it was a thriving place for illegal activity for many a species and humans were considered the lowest species in these parts of the universe with the Sera's being the royal ruling planetary species. Homeless and hungry Jordan would help peddle rust for food and also for his personal stash of the drug, His supplier was a crude Sera named Leith. Abyss black skin tone with a smooth carbon like texture. Eye's were the most terrifying jade. He sold rust to many people all around Earth and was a former soldier in the Eclipsion Army. Jordan knew if he messed around with Leith he'd be dead for the slightest mistake made by a human resulted in extermination. Turning in whatever resources he was able to gather from peddling the drug in the city to Leith, Jordan receives food capsules in return. Also acquiring his next batch of Rust from Leith, he realizes it looks different from before. "It's a new kind of sample we want to test out on earth before hitting the real markets, make sure you sell it all." demands Leith in his stern eclipsionion accent. "Sure thing boss" taking the liquefied drug Jordan and his seventeen year peddler friend from Kent a small planet that orbits Alasus, decide to get high underneath a broken bridge. They are both so curious about this new Rust and begin to inject themselves. The young boy from Kent collapses and bleeds profusely from his nose and eyes, frothing his blood starts to harden, eyes turn to a liquid mercury form. Jordan screams and tries to wake the boy up, but his own body starts shaking due to the effects of the drug. He's stuck and unable to move, in shock. Crying he yells,"Wake up kid, Wake the f**k up". But the kid lays lifeless. Jordan manages to walk away before someone finds him at the scene. He feels different though, he starts to feel energetic, charged like the drug is pumping adrenalin through his entire body. Jordan runs through the wrecked field of abandoned cars avoiding any one on the way, he climbs up a fire escape into an abandoned apartment complex. On stepping inside he notices something sticking out of the back of his neck. There isn't any pain but intense pressure on his back. His arms reach out to investigate what this foreign object is, tugging on it, freaking out he pulls out his spine which is now an alloy like weapon. 

Metalingus has been awakened. Leith informs his Sera'eclipsionion command center,"the side effects of this experimental rust are mutating the strong species into weapons and fatally killing the weak ones." "Finally the humans have some use to us" an unknown voice responds to Leith. 
 


© 2013 KeeD


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I love the story, it really grabbed the readers attention. i loved how descriptive you were with the story. i cant wait to see what happens next :) loved the ending, it makes me want to pull myself into the story. im eager to read the next part of your story

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Wow this is awesome. I am going to read the next chapter. So far so good.

Posted 11 Years Ago


WOW!!! It held me right from the start... one of my favorite subjects too :)
Graphic details and the lengths to which you went in explaining them, wonderful.
And ya... just saying this tongue-in-cheek - Dude! what is it that you have against punctuation! :P
Hehe... never mind.. probably u just went with the flow and missed it at one or two places ... m goin to go to the next chapter now :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Awesome story! I love the name Jordan too. lol Cant wait to read more

Posted 11 Years Ago


The exposition at the beginning almost prevented me from continuing. Honestly I think you did a good job explaining what was needed in the story itself. Also:

"The entire world covered with trash and used waste, it was a thriving place for illegal activity for many a species and humans were considered the lowest species in these parts of the universe with the Sera's being the royal ruling planetary species."

...is a run-on. It's the only one I really noticed. This has the potential to go places. Keep working on it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Very descriptive and intriguing chapter. I enjoyed it very much. Your description is very good and grabs the readers attention, you hook the reader from the beginning. Nicely done, Kee.

Posted 11 Years Ago


this story is exremely captivateing i loveed it

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is rich in description, must have taken you some time! Funnily enough I'm actually reading a book currently called The Awakening, very different to the apocalyptic thriller you have here but I dare say your story line is far more brilliant haha! Can't wait to read the rest of this!!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


I love the story, it really grabbed the readers attention. i loved how descriptive you were with the story. i cant wait to see what happens next :) loved the ending, it makes me want to pull myself into the story. im eager to read the next part of your story

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Keegan, i really love this whole concept! this is very well written, very gripping. captures the reader's attention, with its descriptiveness and storyline. please continue with this, i thoroughly enjoyed reading it, and would like to know what happens next. Brilliant ending by the way too :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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KeeD
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Mumbai, India, India



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Hey I'm Kee, I'm 32 and work as a journalist in Mumbai, India. I dabble in writing poetry and do it purely to pump out the creative juices in my being. Thank you for stopping by, live, laugh and love .. more..

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