Gaia

Gaia what has our world come to

The texture of soil against palm

The crashing of ocean against rock

Gaia my creator I can feel your presence

Drift me away to the promise land

Unite heart with ancestors leave flesh behind

 

The tranquility in the air

Like your breath upon my cheek

Gaia you have raised me

A son of yours grown into a man

In your name O' protector of land

 

Sleep takes me on journeys

To find your subtle touch

Gaia goddess of the universe

Balance the boundaries

Between heaven and earth

 

In the gale of the storm

I feel your anguish

Gaia destroyer of time

Confide in me your child

For it is our fault forgive us

 

Failure to understand your loving plan

Take me aboard your starry skies

Gaia celestial constellations for eyes

Show me the world you envisioned

Let me speak your tongue so all can understand

 

Gaia Have mercy on us save our land.

 

 

Author's Note

The poet introduces nature as the creation of Gaia (Creator of the Universe). He then pleads with her to take him up to heaven so he can talk to the goddess about the way her beautiful creations have gone corrupt. He asks Goddess Gaia to show him a way to stop the destruction and save the world.

Reviews

[Muse]

I don't see anything that should be changed, this is precious. I just witnessed a humble conversation between man, and a higher power. Whatever we believe in and worship, the hour will come when we will feel the need to ask for mercy...the God I believe in will deliver me from damnation. The Goddess you write of...she's an entity that lives in all of us. We have the ability to create and destroy...but we abuse it...Gaia begot Mother earth...so we are responsible for her babe. If we destroy it...we destroy the Goddess within us and anger the God that rules above us.

[KeeD]

Couldn't have described what I felt when writing this poem is a better way Muse, thank you. Glad that you like it ><

[KeeD]

in*

[Muse]

you're on a roll keep on rollin.

[Krithika Raghavan]

I do love the addition of music and pictures to your poetry. It gives a whole new feel.

[KeeD]

Thank you ;3

[Bronwen Cox Hollinger]

Brilliant. It reminds me of the style and philosophy of Sappho.

[KeeD]

Thank you ;3

[Lexi I.]

Love the way the poem worked with the music. This kind of felt like a prayer, and Gaia could have very been any deity, who has the power to control what happens in the world, only in this case it was a woman...

Nicely done, like usual!

[KeeD]

Thank you :D I've been brought up in a house with a lot of women and being the only man I've come to have that respect and understanding for women and I guess it shows through sometimes in whatever I do.

[Overrated-World]

Beautiful write. Great to read.

[KeeD]

Thank you :)

[RoxelanasDream]

A beautiful poem to read now that I'm back from a long hiatus lol. I LOVE how you include music that plays in the background while reading the poem. :) Music is poetry to the ears.

[KeeD]

Yeah omg I've missed seeing your face around :) Haha it's kind of become my signature thing although it's a very risky one at that. Thank you for your sweet words

[RoxelanasDream]

How's everything been? I can't believe it's been a month already since I've been on here. but for good reason. :D Just found out most of my expense in intern+study abroad to russia for a year is a yes. Finally found some motivation to write a poem tonight. CRAM TIME. lol

[KeeD]

OMG WOOHOO :D Поздравляю !!! Can't wait to read it :3 I wrote another poem that I was really looking forward to you reading since you're really skilled with the love genre and the beautiful side of life :) it's called bonfires, whenever you get time < 3 i'd be honored for you to take a looksie. Glad to have you back

[RoxelanasDream]

haha I see what u did there ;) and yes I will gladly review this much in demand poem bonfire.

[Be myself!]

Amazing. I love Greek mythology. lol. Trying to learn Greek right now actually. lol

[KeeD]

Are you :D ? I love Greek Mythology as well :)

[Be myself!]

Yep. When I graduate highschool I am going to Greece.

[BL]

An amazing and well crafted piece, you write about your subject with much affection and detail, I enjoyed reading this very much.

[KeeD]

I enjoyed reading your stories as well :)

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

I have a huge love for Greek mythology, so I automatically love this piece!!!!!!!!! I love the idea of this!!!!!!!!! It's very well written, although Gaia wasn't one I would have thought would live in the stars...After all, she is Mother Earth and she was created from Chaos, so I consider Chaos to be the Mother Goddess... But anyway, beautiful!!!!!!!!!!

[KeeD]

Thank you :D Oh well I haven't researched into it much, I just know she was called the Mother of the Universe along with the title Mother Earth so I took her as an almighty high power in this piece ignoring the other God's etc. Thank you < 3

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Your welcome, and as a writer, you have that right:) Its called creative license:) and some people did worship her as the mother goddess of everything if she was their patron goddess

[KAOlmsted]

I have had the distinct pleasure and privilege of watching you develop and blossom into the writer who produced this exquisite piece. You continue to impress and amaze me, Keegan, with your beautiful voice. Absolutely breathtaking, this.

[KeeD]

It's been such a pleasure to learn and grow under your wing :) If anything I owe my progress if any to all of you on WC with your encouraging support and kind words of motivation. Thank you Kimmers, love you lots!

[KAOlmsted]

xoxo love you, too, sweetness and light.

[CS]

Wonderfully penned, Kee. I am a lover of Gaia too, so this hit really close to home. I can't tell you how many times I have wondered the same thing...what this world has come to.....I don't think it is Her fault though....she is just doing what is in Her nature...and we are doing what is in ours, I guess....which is being completely destructive.

[KeeD]

Thanks ~Courtney~, Destructive we are and I don't exactly blaming Goddess Gaia in this piece but more on the lines of asking her to give me some insight, a solution to better the world :) Thank you so much for your kind words :3