I saw the pic.the title and I KNEW THIS WOULD BE FANTASTIC WORK. There is something magical and romantic about the glow of a bonfire. The smell...the sparks...it inspires the heat of love.
To jazzy skies of grey
Intoxicated by flames reflected in your eyes
Far far away I hide and seek, forever yours
Love like embers implanted in your cheeks
Your fiery smile in the cool breeze
Romantic music set's the mood to please
Roaring with the wind, screaming your name
Chase after you through the seven seas
Bonfires take us away
I love how you ended every thought with the "Bonfire's take us away" such a fluid read. A favorite.
another thing..Put me to sleep, some dreams I forever want to keep" that saying is worth quoting over and over again...dreams and words to live by. xo
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Haha wow you make me so proud of writing :D Like i'll be honest with you muse, I sit down and go to .. read moreHaha wow you make me so proud of writing :D Like i'll be honest with you muse, I sit down and go to write something and I honestly don't believe in it until I read the reviews on here and I start to question myself... is it really as good as these amazing people say, I mean wow you make me feel proud to write, thank you!!! I loved that line too "Put me to slee, some dreams I forever want to keep" I hope the poem plants an image or reminds people of their fondest memories of being in love :)
11 Years Ago
Oh by the way Muse is the font and music distracting?
11 Years Ago
hell no...the music is superp..you know my taste...I think. If there was singing...I think it can t.. read morehell no...the music is superp..you know my taste...I think. If there was singing...I think it can take away from the poet's words. But it's soft...moody..who is this guy he's fabulous!
11 Years Ago
Luis oneto, you can find his music on soundcloud.com, Thank you for being so supportive < 3
The subject matter is good and has a lot of promise, but I'm having problems with the meter staying consistant. It doesn't need to be drab, you can change it up, but especially in a poem this long it needs to be consistant.
Loved the parts in red especially. This reminds me of another poem written by a delightful girl a few months ago... So wonderful and kinda soothing....
What I really love about this is the feel and the capacity of this poem to make me remember things that have happened in my life. well done~
Once again, beautiful. When I read this I picture two people who have had a troubled past, in love with each other forgetting everything about the world. This is just like a 'warm' feeling poem, the kind that makes me smile while reading and makes me feel fuzzy inside. Needless to say, I love it!
Wow, this is so incredibly beautiful. I'll admit I'm a sucker for a good love poem, and this was far beyond that. It was beautifully written, it had a lovely flow, and it set off a mood that really put me at ease. Great job, I think you really accomplished what you were going for with this poem.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much Kelsey ~ I love your style of writing too, you're a story teller and you do it bea.. read moreThank you so much Kelsey ~ I love your style of writing too, you're a story teller and you do it beautifully through a poetic form and that's the kind of writing I truly appreciate. Hope you have someone special in your life to share a bonfire with someday < 3 xoxo.
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much, honestly, it means the world. I hope the same for you. xo
Very romantic, mames me wish i had that special someone though I must say, bonfires have always freaked me out haha.......nicely done
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Haha they're scary I'll admit but there's something beautiful about the warmth and surroundings they.. read moreHaha they're scary I'll admit but there's something beautiful about the warmth and surroundings they encompass. If you felt the need to have someone special after reading this my job as the author of this poem is accomplished :D thank you for your kind review. :)
Wow. I felt like I was just reading a first person point of view in a scene where usually in romantic movies is the part where all the girls go like AWWWW I wonder if my bf or the person I love ever thought that while with me at least once. And the picture with the poem, correlating it both together, the poem's imagery and the pic kind of gives off how this pic shows what his thoughts are in his mind. Giving it a sort of reality. And fire has such great symbolism to eternal love or desire. However, it can also relate to blindness to the consequences that are ahead. Oh and we know how we always end up having that. :) Lovely write.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Haha so true :) instead of sitting by the fire we get thrown in it face first, ch'yeah thanks life!<.. read moreHaha so true :) instead of sitting by the fire we get thrown in it face first, ch'yeah thanks life!
Thank you for your awesome review was looking forward to you reading it :D. I was the girl going AWWWW in this situation wondering if the entire WC feels the same way lol
11 Years Ago
Haha. It's such an amazing thought when u know there are billions of people that are different than .. read moreHaha. It's such an amazing thought when u know there are billions of people that are different than us but in the funniest ways we are just alike. Haha this reminds me Valentine's Day is coming up. OH lawd. PDA errwhere soon. lol :P
Great work. Speacialy the line "Put me to sleep, some dreams I forever want to Keep".
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you :) this is a dream I haven't experienced yet, I wrote this after a really hard break up so.. read moreThank you :) this is a dream I haven't experienced yet, I wrote this after a really hard break up so this was my escape, this is what I imagine love to be like :)
11 Years Ago
ya.. It lands up making one a writer and a genuine one seriously. Anyways It was a great job :-)
Hey I'm Kee, I'm 32 and work as a journalist in Mumbai, India. I dabble in writing poetry and do it purely to pump out the creative juices in my being. Thank you for stopping by, live, laugh and love .. more..