I saw the pic.the title and I KNEW THIS WOULD BE FANTASTIC WORK. There is something magical and romantic about the glow of a bonfire. The smell...the sparks...it inspires the heat of love.
To jazzy skies of grey
Intoxicated by flames reflected in your eyes
Far far away I hide and seek, forever yours
Love like embers implanted in your cheeks
Your fiery smile in the cool breeze
Romantic music set's the mood to please
Roaring with the wind, screaming your name
Chase after you through the seven seas
Bonfires take us away
I love how you ended every thought with the "Bonfire's take us away" such a fluid read. A favorite.
another thing..Put me to sleep, some dreams I forever want to keep" that saying is worth quoting over and over again...dreams and words to live by. xo
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Haha wow you make me so proud of writing :D Like i'll be honest with you muse, I sit down and go to .. read moreHaha wow you make me so proud of writing :D Like i'll be honest with you muse, I sit down and go to write something and I honestly don't believe in it until I read the reviews on here and I start to question myself... is it really as good as these amazing people say, I mean wow you make me feel proud to write, thank you!!! I loved that line too "Put me to slee, some dreams I forever want to keep" I hope the poem plants an image or reminds people of their fondest memories of being in love :)
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Oh by the way Muse is the font and music distracting?
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hell no...the music is superp..you know my taste...I think. If there was singing...I think it can t.. read morehell no...the music is superp..you know my taste...I think. If there was singing...I think it can take away from the poet's words. But it's soft...moody..who is this guy he's fabulous!
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Luis oneto, you can find his music on soundcloud.com, Thank you for being so supportive < 3
You've created such an amazing mood with the photograph and the acoustics that the poem itself was like icing on top of the most sweetest delectable cake.
It is beautiful, romantic, and playful like a slow burning bonfire.
You are an amazing poet and I love your tone in this poem.
Im noticing a pattern, our work seems to be total opposites hahaha, you generally have a gentle or sweet tone to your writing, giving the reaer a warm feeling. And you do well at it, you do welll at displaying emotion and setting the tone. Even your general word choice reflects your warming intent. Great stuff man.
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I write according to my mood heh, I was feeling mad alone and started to dream of an imaginative fix.. read moreI write according to my mood heh, I was feeling mad alone and started to dream of an imaginative fix and gave birth to this piece.
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Right on. I dig it.
This is fantastic, you always touch me deeply with your poems, they say so much, they have so much pathos, and richness within them:
"On the white sands by the Caspian shores
Looking at the night blend in with the waves
Fragments of shells under our feet"
That is so grounded, so one with eachother and the beauty of nature to embrace you.
Your last lines:
"Like a candle on a table shedding warmth out
Bonfires take us away..."
bring me back memories, from the periode in Italy where I've lived, and we danced, and run all together in the sea at midnight for it was "Ferragosto" manifesto... sigh :) you dance with words, and I can only listen en enjoy! so beautiful, I'm your fan forever! :)
- Elisa
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Thank you so much Elisa, that must have been amazing I've been to Italy only for a day and just stay.. read moreThank you so much Elisa, that must have been amazing I've been to Italy only for a day and just stayed in Milan, I had a stopover flight to the states. Was beautiful, I preferred that one day visit in Italy to my month vacation in the states, I played football with the local boys by the cathedral, I ate the best pizza i've tasted in my life and I had the funniest driver who would make me laugh and show us all the amazing places in Milan. I wish I could just travel the world and write inspiring pieces like you do, you're an inspiration to me and hopefully many more writers. I hope you know that xoxo.
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Oh fantastic!!! next to "Il Duomo" I lived in Milan too next to the famous church. :) also in Naples.. read moreOh fantastic!!! next to "Il Duomo" I lived in Milan too next to the famous church. :) also in Naples, maybe I've seen you playing soccer lol... it was in 1998, though. Italy is my beloved country, and I plan when I'm retired to live there forever. It's wonderful you share this with me. Milan is so different from Southern Italy, in rich and poor, but the feeling is always there. You inspire me too, for I have a yearning to visit your country as you know. I have a friend who did go there for a month or longer, and I hear the best stories, and adventures... :) you're the best, thanks a lot! :) xoxo
I think bonfires roar with passion. This poem did that too. It is a beautifully penned love poem, no uncouth cheesy lines, just the perfect words and perfect picture for a perfect piece. This is going to my library cause i definitely love it:-):-):-D.
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I love the way you express it, Roar with passion.. so much emotion expressed in that one line itself.. read moreI love the way you express it, Roar with passion.. so much emotion expressed in that one line itself, brings a huge smile on my face as I see bonfires in a similar light, passion!!!!! Thank you so much for adding it to your library, that really means a lot, xoxo Kee.
Fantastic work Keegan, definitely my favorite of yours. From the surroundings, to the romance, to the music, you captured it all so perfectly in this beautifully written poem. Well done! 100/100
Best Romantic poem i ever read bro :)
Enjoyed your work so much .. Keep it up!
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oh wow thank you so much, have an awesome week, be sure to read request me anything you'd like me to.. read moreoh wow thank you so much, have an awesome week, be sure to read request me anything you'd like me to read :)
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My pleasure and Sure bro, Same goes to you too :) TC
Hey I'm Kee, I'm 32 and work as a journalist in Mumbai, India. I dabble in writing poetry and do it purely to pump out the creative juices in my being. Thank you for stopping by, live, laugh and love .. more..