Bonfires

(turn your volume down to a mellow low) About time I put out something romantic.For those who've found happily ever after, this ones for you :)

Bonfires

 

 

 Days are drifting astray

Light it ablaze, close beside you

Is where I want to stay

On the white sands by the Caspian shores

Looking at the night blend in with the waves

Fragments of shells under our feet

Fearless we lay counting the stars

Bonfires take us away

 

To jazzy skies of grey

Intoxicated by flames reflected in your eyes

Far far away I hide and seek, forever yours

Love like embers implanted in your cheeks

Your fiery smile in the cool breeze

Romantic music sets the mood to please     

Roaring with the wind, screaming your name

Chase after you through the seven seas

Bonfires take us away

 

To a mystical place where the moon and the sun       

Kiss and exchange glances, summer and winter romances

The life within a glimpse of an eye is an eternal lullaby

Put me to sleep, some dreams I forever want to keep

Your presence and essence with absence of doubt

Like a candle on a table shedding warmth out  

Bonfires take us away...

...Towards an endless love

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Muse]

I saw the pic.the title and I KNEW THIS WOULD BE FANTASTIC WORK. There is something magical and romantic about the glow of a bonfire. The smell...the sparks...it inspires the heat of love.

To jazzy skies of grey
Intoxicated by flames reflected in your eyes
Far far away I hide and seek, forever yours
Love like embers implanted in your cheeks
Your fiery smile in the cool breeze
Romantic music set's the mood to please
Roaring with the wind, screaming your name
Chase after you through the seven seas
Bonfires take us away


I love how you ended every thought with the "Bonfire's take us away" such a fluid read. A favorite.

another thing..Put me to sleep, some dreams I forever want to keep" that saying is worth quoting over and over again...dreams and words to live by. xo

[KeeD]

Haha wow you make me so proud of writing :D Like i'll be honest with you muse, I sit down and go to write something and I honestly don't believe in it until I read the reviews on here and I start to question myself... is it really as good as these amazing people say, I mean wow you make me feel proud to write, thank you!!! I loved that line too "Put me to slee, some dreams I forever want to keep" I hope the poem plants an image or reminds people of their fondest memories of being in love :)

[KeeD]

Oh by the way Muse is the font and music distracting?

[Muse]

hell no...the music is superp..you know my taste...I think. If there was singing...I think it can take away from the poet's words. But it's soft...moody..who is this guy he's fabulous!

[KeeD]

Luis oneto, you can find his music on soundcloud.com, Thank you for being so supportive < 3

[Muse]

only tweek...keep reading

...Because we love to the end

maybe instead;
read moreonly tweek...keep reading

...Because we love to the end

maybe instead;

because we will love until the end?

or becaues we love until the end....sorry...grammar is not my thing...can't help but think it's missing a word.

[KeeD]

let me know if this works :3

[Muse]

Yes!!

[Holly Mason]

very nice thank you for sharing

[KeeD]

thank you ;3

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Far far away I hide and seek, forever yours
Amazing write.

[KeeD]

:) Thank you Mehak < 3

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Anytime

[stephen dillon]

sooo many good line but the jazzy skies of grey, thats what really got me

[KeeD]

Haha i'm getting mixed reviews on that line, some people didn't appreciate it

[Carolann Dowsett]

This is so soft and romantic and so wonderfully written. There is nothing quite like a bonfire on the beach on a warm starry night with someone you love. Your poem creates some lovely imagery and enables the reader to drift away to a place free from the worries and trials of this world.

[KeeD]

Thank you :) it's all I ask for just 2 minutes to let my readers drift away~

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome :)

[Sarah Redigan]

Another amazing write my dear ♡♥

[KeeD]

Thank you < 3 just wondering how you add the hearts :P

[Sarah Redigan]

My phone ☆

[Sarah Redigan]

And ur welcome

[Rane Miller]

Second stanza: "set's" should never have an apostrophe.

"Intoxicated by flames reflected in your eyes" That is really a wonderful line. Although, in the line before it, "jazzy" is out of place with the mood of the poem. While yes, it is intimate and "romantic", the imagery gives a darker sense, or side, of romance.

Ahh, can't have a romance poem without the sun and the moon, can we? I know that sounds sardonic. And it probably is. But it's fine, just cliche kinda. It's a good piece. It was refreshing to not read something incredibly mushy. Nicely penned.

[KeeD]

I'll edit the sets part. Showy yet mysterious is what I meant by jazzy skies. As regards to the sun and the moon I interpreted it in a way that they spend the whole night as the moon departs and the sun rises, (the couple) metaphorically speaking the sun and the moon share a kiss. Thank you so much for the review, appreciate it.

[KatDarkness]

The imagery and the flow of the words was just so perfect, and the picture matched it beautifully. Wonderful poem! :) 100/100

[KeeD]

Thank you :3

[kublakhan27]

I love the connections that run through this piece...sun and moon, fire and water, stillness and movement...and there doesn't appear to be a wrong choice...the common denominator is simply having the company of this person, and that's all that is needed for happiness...nice work my friend :)

[KeeD]

exactly!! no one could have said it better, you understand my poems so well :)

[kublakhan27]

What can I say, you get me and I get you, which is no small feat when talking about two writers...our styles are a little different but our imaginations seem to come from a similar place :)

[KAOlmsted]

Beautiful. I hate to leave just a one word review, Keegan, but there is no other word to describe this --beautiful-- piece. Period the end. Beautiful.

[KeeD]

Thank you Kim, Just like you~

[KeeD]

Beautiful~

[KAOlmsted]

*blush* xoxo

[creativequill]

Very fluid piece, flows very well :) captivating and intense just like the fire you write about. Great piece keegan :)

[KeeD]

Thank you, you're very captivating yourself :)

[creativequill]

Thank you :)