Date with the needle

Take a deep breath before you start reading so the music can kick in.

Date with a needle (a different kind of love story)

Lately, I've stared into the void

The darkness in life is all too bright

Everything I've built now destroyed

How does a mother continue to fight this fight?

 

Welcome to the green mile

A cemetery for the living just waiting to die

Another outcast, another exile

Struggling to find a way to say goodbye

 

I just want you to know my child

Tomorrow, I have a date with a needle
so when you grow up confused and riled

Today, I would like to apologize to you of all people

 

 

Dear Leo,

Its mom

I love you son

I know you're hurting

But it's alright

I'll watch out for you

Tuck you in every night

You're probably too small to understand

But someday you'll be an understanding man

I would like you to know mommy's innocent

The drugs I carried in, were to pay rent

Drugs lead me to an early death

A haunting reality I'm dealing with

Become the man I dreamt you would

An honest man, a man that stands for good

Baby time is running out

It's too late to get my life sorted out

But Leo don't you worry, not one bit

Just be good and learn to live with it

You'll be okay

You'll always find your way

And even now when my time is up

Just know mommy's smiling, she hasn't given up

Baby, I'll always be your mom

Never will I forget you son

The last meal arrives

My tears continue to drop

For justice will claim lives 

Until the drug trade stops

 

The last rights read

I have a smile on my face

I’m soon to be dead

But I remember your embrace

My hands clasped tight

The needle penetrates my skin

I can feel my lungs put up a fight

But the lethal chemicals win

 

Final breath close

Am I still alive?

Leo's cute nose

Time of death: 12:45

 

 

Author's Note

just an idea I got this afternoon, any feedback appreciated

Reviews

You're touched by something higher my friend. This is so perfect, and well written, in feeling, in touch, in element, in story telling, in bringing over the daily news, almost, of how hard life can be, and how real the facts are. You left me reading, feeling, and pausing here many times, an emotional lump in my throat, of beauty, of pureness, I can't describe. Some poets are bringing it over, but you really touch... I'm in awe of your talents, and skill with this one, (a hard one to write about). But this happens in life. I feel you're a invisible journalist of purity, this was utterly fantastic. If you could see my arms right now, they have goosebumps. (happens not often).

Thank you for being the man and poet you are, and for sharing your mind/thoughts, with us all.

- Elisa

[Bluefire]

All I can say is.... Wow..
This took my breath away..
Leaving me shaking in its stead.
It was a thrilling poem, very intense..
I trully loved reading it from beginning to end. It's one of my favorite types of poems, an execution.
Well done! ^^

[KeeD]

Thank you :D I love your reviews you always make me feel like a million dollars, you're too sweet < 3xoxo

[Bluefire]

^^ Aw, no problem.

[chandlerl]

This was very well done, letters are always good ways to tell how you feel and they are good to keep and read over from the people you care about. I'm reading The Greatest Love Letters of all Time and it's very moving. This was obviously a different type of love letter and goodbye letter. It was very beautiful and just the right amount of darkness of a mother saying goodbye to her son.
Lovely.
Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
and for you I mean this sincerely,
Chandler Lewis
=)

[KeeD]

I'm glad I could show you my perception on the other sides of a prisoner, specially one that's on death row. Thank you so much for your kindness i'm blown away by your words Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
and for you I mean this sincerely, is the nicest thing anyone's ever said to me. Thank you Chandler, much respect.

[chandlerl]

=)

[chandlerl]

=)

[chandlerl]

This was very well done, letters are always good ways to tell how you feel and they are good to keep and read over from the people you care about. I'm reading The Greatest Love Letters of all Time and it's very moving. This was obviously a different type of love letter and goodbye letter. It was very beautiful and just the right amount of darkness of a mother saying goodbye to her son.
Lovely.
Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
and for you I mean this sincerely,
Chandler Lewis
=)

[misha]

This was flawless.

[KeeD]

thank you :D!!!

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Wow! This is really powerful!!!! I love the story line for this one as well, and I may not hear the same music you do, but I definately hear something with it. Beautiful!!!!!!! I can definately understand how the mother must be feeling, although I have to say, I'd hate to be that child. I love it!!!!!!!

[KeeD]

Thank you, I really know now the story touched people with all the reviews it got and i'm glad because the response was greater than what I intended. I don't think I fully understand the music expression you state but as long as you heard the words speak to you is more than I could ever be grateful for. I agree but the truth is there are so many children like this out there and my heart goes out to them.

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

As does mine. I'm about to have to go, bye:)

[Carly]

I loved that the note was introduced in the middle of the poem. It set a nice pace. I wish I was one of those people who could read with music playing because the music choice was powerful. A very interesting story. I'm not a poet, I'm a story writer, so I see great potential for this to be a great short story. Very nice work!

[KeeD]

I honestly didn't expect it to get such attention :D it was just an afternoon idea I originally wanted to write something like shawshank redemption but from a female perspective but when I started writing it turned out into this :D i'm really happy with the outcome after reading these reviews. Thank you for reviewing Carly :)

[Carly]

My pleasure!

[being me]

beautiful...speechless...

[KeeD]

Thank you :)

[being me]

:)

[unshakenScene]

this was amazing and it has so much meaning to it that it just took me away when i read this

[KeeD]

I'm glad, thank you for reviewing :D

[Shawna]

Amazing poem with such raw emotion. There's nothing worse than seeing a child grow up without their mother, especially in situations like these. Very touching write Keegan.

[KeeD]

Thank you for reviewing, I couldn't agree more, every child needs a mother.

[VeCeWallace]

This is astonishing!!!!!!!!!

[KeeD]

Thank you for reviewing!!