Date with the needle

Take a deep breath before you start reading so the music can kick in.

Date with a needle (a different kind of love story)

Lately, I've stared into the void

The darkness in life is all too bright

Everything I've built now destroyed

How does a mother continue to fight this fight?

 

Welcome to the green mile

A cemetery for the living just waiting to die

Another outcast, another exile

Struggling to find a way to say goodbye

 

I just want you to know my child

Tomorrow, I have a date with a needle
so when you grow up confused and riled

Today, I would like to apologize to you of all people

 

 

Dear Leo,

Its mom

I love you son

I know you're hurting

But it's alright

I'll watch out for you

Tuck you in every night

You're probably too small to understand

But someday you'll be an understanding man

I would like you to know mommy's innocent

The drugs I carried in, were to pay rent

Drugs lead me to an early death

A haunting reality I'm dealing with

Become the man I dreamt you would

An honest man, a man that stands for good

Baby time is running out

It's too late to get my life sorted out

But Leo don't you worry, not one bit

Just be good and learn to live with it

You'll be okay

You'll always find your way

And even now when my time is up

Just know mommy's smiling, she hasn't given up

Baby, I'll always be your mom

Never will I forget you son

The last meal arrives

My tears continue to drop

For justice will claim lives 

Until the drug trade stops

 

The last rights read

I have a smile on my face

I’m soon to be dead

But I remember your embrace

My hands clasped tight

The needle penetrates my skin

I can feel my lungs put up a fight

But the lethal chemicals win

 

Final breath close

Am I still alive?

Leo's cute nose

Time of death: 12:45

 

 

Author's Note

just an idea I got this afternoon, any feedback appreciated

Reviews

You're touched by something higher my friend. This is so perfect, and well written, in feeling, in touch, in element, in story telling, in bringing over the daily news, almost, of how hard life can be, and how real the facts are. You left me reading, feeling, and pausing here many times, an emotional lump in my throat, of beauty, of pureness, I can't describe. Some poets are bringing it over, but you really touch... I'm in awe of your talents, and skill with this one, (a hard one to write about). But this happens in life. I feel you're a invisible journalist of purity, this was utterly fantastic. If you could see my arms right now, they have goosebumps. (happens not often).

Thank you for being the man and poet you are, and for sharing your mind/thoughts, with us all.

- Elisa

[Bella]

I cried... sobbed actually. An amazingly powerful piece. Great. Absolutely beautiful.

[KeeD]

That's beautiful that something I wrote could have that effect on such an amazing young soul. Thank you so much for your review, I'll check out some of your work to repay the kindness. xoxo Kee

[Bella]

greatly appreciated :)

[Ruth]

Oh wow...errr...this has left me so emotional, damn good piece love...wow!

[KeeD]

thanks poppy < 3

[Sarah Redigan]

I was speechless at first this is not where I expected ur pome to go. I expected a diffrent way but it was amazing littlerly breath taking .. I never usually read longer writings but I couldnt stop reading this one.. ♡♥ keep it up

[KeeD]

Speechless is good :D I never like long poems too, I see the length and get put off at the start but they're a few writers on here that use that style but I still love reading their work because it's always amazing.

[Sarah Redigan]

Exactly

[Serenity Faith]

I can't even begin to express how awesome this piece is. The story just catches you immediately, the fact that it's told in poetic form adds to the impact it has. I hurt for this mother. Even though she did wrong...I feel for her. You my dear, are beyond talented. Please don't ever stop writing!

[KeeD]

Thank you D: wow thank you "tears up"

[Serenity Faith]

Awww you are most welcome ^_^

[KeeD]

:D the pictures on your profile are beyond adorable :)

[Serenity Faith]

There you go again turning me into a tomato xD you're such a sweetie thanks Kee!

[Kaylee]

Hm... This is a very interesting write... It's very dark and shows much emotion... I really enjoyed this. :)

[KeeD]

thank you :3

[Kaylee]

You're welcome. :)

[Muse]

You paint a very sad...picture of someone's reality. But then again...as we all know..life is not always pretty. GREAT WRITING!

[KeeD]

thank you so much!

[creativequill]

I was riveted to this piece, it was strong and full of emotion, told a brilliant heartbreaking story, one of the best thinga I've read, fantastic job!!

[KeeD]

thank you so much! wow

[creativequill]

Welcome :)

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

I love how you wave the art of poetry and story telling together so well

[KeeD]

thank you sam :3

[Euro]

Very nice, Keegan!
I enjoyed this from beginning to end :)
Great job,
-Penelope H.

[KeeD]

Thank you P

[Lexi I.]

Kee, this was probably ONE of the BEST poems in the writerscafe cache! LOVED the story that it told. It spoke of anger, regret and much sadness. It was the mother's form of repenting for her sins, but not in front of a divine being; it was before her son. This was beautifully written, and I've re-read it a few time already!

[KeeD]

Wow thank you so much, glad you liked it!