Line of control

A poem regarding the brutality of the Pakistani Army on the Line of Control

This imaginary line

Defines you from I

You stay on your side

Cross it and die

We draw such lines

to claim land

power and greed

go hand in hand

Cease fire

Lets talk peace

Brutal slaughter

Two soldiers deceased

Deny it you will

Blame the birds or the sky

S**t hits the ceiling 

You pretend or you lie

Mutilated were their bodies

Devastated is our country

We mourn our martyrs 

As you claim your trophies 

Enough is enough

You want to fight rough?

We won't retaliate like animals 

But we'll make you suffer name and shame

We'll make sure you're the black dot

In the map of history

We'll show the world

How barbaric you are

Dig your own graves

You cowards

For the line of control 

Maybe just an imaginary line

But in the mind of us Indians 

All your crimes

Will not go unpunished

For God and Country 

We will press, as

You continue to deny

Justice will unravel

Your disgusting lie 

Jai Hind

Author's Note

Salute to all the Indian Soldiers who lost their lives on the line of control and strength to all the families of these brave-hearts.

Reviews

[Lucy]

Ok. So for me this wasn't your best ok. It was good.

[KeeD]

Thank you, yeah it was full of emotion, mostly rage

[Lucy]

Sure. It's fine.

[CecilA]

Keegan,

You write your passion, disgust, anger, grief, diappointment, and
frustration, with it's worthy intensity and caring. You have true patriotism - love of your fellow man, woman and child. That's patriotism: People. There can be not lines; real or imaginary when it comes to love for our fellow persons. There is no greater love than the willingness to lay down our own life for a fellow human being. Bless these soldiers who gave their lives for others. But to mutilate these blessed vessels of devotion is satanic. There is no justification for such sorry abuse. Hell awaits cowards who preach peace and deliver war; murder defenseless souls for grains of sand and drops of oil.

I love this patriotic poem and share you passion for justice and peace. Well done.

Let there be peace on Earth and let it begin with me. Peace to you my brother, Keegan.

Love, Cecil

[KeeD]

Peace to you to Sir, Much respect for the wonderful words and hope that some day there will be peace maybe not in our lifetime but for our future generations.

[being me]

jai hind the same....salute to our motherland and all those who lost their lives for the welfare of our nation...

[KeeD]

:)

[kublakhan27]

Profoundly and poignantly said...great piece :)

[KeeD]

thank you sir!

[kublakhan27]

No problem :)

[s y e]

Amazing write and so very true. This has so much emotion. Well done!

[KeeD]

thank you ma'am!

[s y e]

Your welcome, sir

[Baby Ricochet]

Tribal blood runs high. On the ground once you kill someone and see your boys get killed and maimed, all bets are off. Brilliant poem Keegan.

[KeeD]

thank you sir!

[N!LoC]

Sigh.. another great amazing poem taken from the unlikeliest inspiration which i would never have thought of ! great work great work

[KeeD]

Thank you sir!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Amazing write and so very true. The ridiculous fighting for greed and power needs to stop. When will this world wake up and see the truth.

[KeeD]

Doubt it, but I hope it does wake up eventually!, Thank you for the review ma'am

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome :-)

[Eve]

Wow. This has so much emotion flooding the readers mind. I love this write. Wonderful.

[Eve]

Um, you sent me a RR, but I've already read this, and reviewed...

[KeeD]

Thank you sorry about that D:

[Eve]

It's fine. :)

[MOON]

We dont see the Humanity in each other so we carve up land and make lines and we kill for ideology and Gods piece of the earth. Human beings are one of a kind. Flowing emotional write.

[KeeD]

Thank you for reviewing