I Desire Foxfire

A poem about a character from a popular game

I Desire Foxfire

 

There's magic inside you

You ignite my inner flame

Turn the temperature up

Oh but it's all part of your game

 

Freezing chills across my surface

As you charm me with your eyes

Subtle blue in winter, my

Mind frozen in between your thighs.

 

I'm drawn in towards you

As I fail to recognize

Your orb of deception

As you come to claim my life

 

My heart's beating faster

As I see the crimson lace

Cover your bountiful chest

Springing joy to my face.

 

Your dark hair sets flight

Manipulating the wind tonight

Essence thief I've been robbed

By your beauty...

 

As you, spirit rush towards me.

 

Author's Note

Poem about a League of Legends character called Ahri, she's a nine tailed fox with the beauty to make jaws drop.

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Beautifully written... "Essence theif I've been robbed/By your beauty..." --great lines. I know you had a specific character in mind while writing this, but it could easily be a metaphor for any beautiful "character" in your life or anyone else's life. The desire is tangible; the desire to be loved, manipulated, taken into the graces of a goddess...but there is a dark side as well. Well presented.

[Shay]

love this, it really does capture Ahri :) and the wording was amazing and beautiful

[A.E. Surdam]

Sweet poem. Wonderful, just wonderful. Your use of imagery is inspiring and expressive. A great write! Thanks for sharing!

[River Page]

So I have absolutlely no idea what the Leauge of Legends is, or what a nine tailed fox is, but whatever. This was really sexy and I thought it was about a girlfriend or something. It has a bit of innocence to it also, which is a nice element. Good work!

[Lexi I.]

Great job! Even though I don't know anything about the league of legends, this was captivating. Two things (grammar-wise)--I don't know if you were intending for them to be that way: One would be in the line "My hearts beating faster"--> it would be "heart's"

Another that confused me a bit is the last line. Is it meant to be more like "As you, spirit, rush towards me" or "As your spirit rushes towards me"... Just a question...

Other than those two things, awesome! :)

[KeeD]

Haha you should try it out if you're into gaming to kill time :) and Yeah grammar wise your corrections were spot on, I don't really pay that much attention to grammar as I should. To be honest, let's keep this, hush hush but grammar and I aren't really the best of mates.

[Lexi I.]

I won't tell a soul ;)

[s y e]

O.o Daaaaaaamn. You. Are. Gooooood.
This is soooo creative dude and very well written. Flows great, lovely way with words. It's perfect! :-) You got a creative mind and its a great!!

100/100

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

WOW I LOVE this ... It maybe my fave of yours so far

100/100

added to my faves

[KeeD]

:D < 3 thank you hun, much love and respect!
(night, it's like 5am :D so i'm off to bed) tried writing a poem but didn't turn out as good as I wanted it so yeah i'm just going to work on it some more tomorrow :D xoxo.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

you better get to sleep lol and I forgot to say I loved the structure of this and the bold font and the blue and red ... added so much depth to the poem

Goodnight

[KeeD]

Blue are your eyes, red my favorite color. Hint hint lol. night

[AWKOS]

i play league also and this is great, but besides the game stuff i like this poem alot it flows down the page and is easy to read, again great job

p.s- new to wwriting poetry and just getting some stuff up wudnt mind if u reviewed mine as well,

[Ashly Christen]

I love it great job, great flow, easy to read, enchanting

[KeeD]

Thanks :) send me a RR to any of your work and i'll be sure to read, review and return the kindness

[Ashly Christen]

ok ill do my best if not just swing by my page and pick one, I try to keep them short lol for attention spans :P

[masqued_muse]

Gorgeous visuals. My son, 27, adores "League"....you should look him up. While ur at it, get this frickin' genius WRITER.....to post in here. Tell him..."Ur MOM said!" You are a magical writer. No prism spared....His name is...Dustin Weyler.^^
masqued_muse

[KeeD]

Oh i'd totally love to game with him sometime, my in game name would be "bondanime" I'd definitely have a nice talk with him too and love to read his work. Thank you for the kind review and hopefully our combined effort can get Dustin on here :)

[Ashly Christen]

thank you so much