Flight 5150

Collaboration by CREEPER and Keegan D'souza http://www.writerscafe.org/Im-buried-alive

FLIGHT 5150

I am aviator

 A hater of mankind

I control this monstrosity

My craft roars

Straight into an atrocity

My physique trained

To control this plane

But my mind is negligent

To the devil beside me

 

Black box

Collect my sound

Before we hit our burial ground

Let them know how this all went down

Bipolar co-pilot

You seek to destroy us?

 Holding a gun to my head

Your mission you have said

332 passengers soon to be dead....just up ahead

Turbulence again, as sinners begin

To say their prayers, nothing left but despair

Why today, Haven't I cried enough

Divorce papers served by the wife

Daughter with leukemia, fighting for her life

I've worked hard to reach here

In the air I feel alive

 I might be a broken man down there

But up here I feel revived

Nose in decent

Our fate is sealed

This is your captain speaking

Flight 5150

Is on it's final descension

Pray for your resurrection

 

As I look into the windshield

Seeing the gun in my hand

Pointed at my head

I know I will soon be surrounded by the dead

 

I realize, it was I

Who crashed this plane

It was I

Who went insane

Limbs severed from the hip

Receiver still in hand with a tight grip

Houston

We've hit the ground

In Hades my soul has shut down...inactive

Author's Note

Collaboration between CREEPER and Keegan D'souza.
Schizophrenic pilot having an episode on the job causing one of the worst crashes in history. Enjoy :)

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

A nice collaboration. You all have styles that work well together in the sense that each of you writes with a distinctively powerful poetic voice. This reminds me a bit of some of the metal music I've heard in my day; it has a certain dark, lyrical sense to it. Nicely done.

[Rob Santana]

Damn, I haven't read this one in a while, still reads like a killer piece of work!!! Killer collab!!

[Eric Cox]

Cool creation. A well created piece with a spiral into doom. Well done you two!

[xXChanceXx]

You can tell that a lot of thought was put into this. I really enjoy writing having to do with military/war/planes and stuff like that, so this was very enjoyable. Nicely written. Interesting topic.

[KeeD]

Thanks mate, both Creeper and I had a lot of fun doing this and we love planes or any kind of technology which can be a double edged sword. Thank you.

[xXChanceXx]

You're welcome. Yeah, it really cool.

[Bluefire]

"Black box
Collect my sound
Before we hit our burial ground"
"This is your captain speaking
Flight 5150
Is on it's final descension
Pray for your resurrection"
Such a thriller this poem was, from beginning to end I had to keep reading!
I loved the twist at the end! Great job! ^^

[Max Teal]

"Bipolar co-pilot
You seek to destroy us?"

Very good. They are always around us.

[Lewis Davis-Norman]

A lot of thought has gone into this, I can tell. The music is perfect and the poem is creative and original. The ending is just brilliant. 100/100!

[KeeD]

Thank you, Creeper and I actually pulled this off in an hour or two we were so excited about it we didn't even wait it out before uploading it. Thanks for the awesome review. Kee

[The Dreamer]

wow - i am robbed of speech ....... this was just AWESOME. the music went with it so well, i felt a shiver down my spine. it gave an eerie and 'creepy' backdrop to the whole plot and complemented it amazingly! and the plot was..... speechless again - the last stanza was gripping!

[KeeD]

xD WOW that's what I like to hear from a review. Honesty Thank you. < 3!!!!

[skiayly]

It was good, and I liked the twist at the end. Keep up the good work!

[KeeD]

Thanks Skily, Have a great 2013!

[skiayly]

You welcome and the same for you!

[Sethnicity]

I love that you took the POV of the killer and pilot. the best part is the sudden realization the central character has when he realizes that he is the killer.

[KeeD]

thank you :D love that the twist comes out as a surprise for our readers even though it's a poem