The City at Night

Looking outside my window at night inspired me

  ~~ The City at Night ~~

                                                                           

People walk the roads hiding behind a mask

Only by dusk is their true identity revealed

As a single mother puts her kids to sleep,

She opens a bottle of wine, tastefully

Sending her worries away to the back of her brain

As tonight is the night she logs onto a dating site

To find her soul mate.

As the youth of the city light up the town

They know all the places that are hard to be found

Foods from diverse lands as far as Japan

The city at night can be wondrous land.

Only a true local can understand.

Sitting by the beach, counting the waves

Free in the dark ci-contre to the day that makes us slaves.

Share a beer with a buddy who sets travel next day.

Only at night does the inner child come out to play

But the city can be ruthless too and have its own way.

Girls working for wage by spreading their thighs

Criminals walking the streets in plain disguise

Horrors unheard of can happen in the blink of an eye

For the city is mysterious to poor old oblivious you.

Cops all around making some cash

Young teenagers they sure like to harass

Their word is law; they speak on behalf of the city

Dangerous can it be if your girlfriend is pretty.

Molestation happens more often than you think

For some masks broken shed light on the crazy,

For the right price, justice's vision gets hazy.

Don't you worry though, don't let them scare you

The city protects its own, for

It's a living, breathing, life changing machine.

So if you find yourself out at night,

Don't fear, Arise, alas it is your moment

Show the city you're a part of its bones

For the strong survive and make it home

...In the city that never sleeps.

 

 

Author's Note

Lack of sleep tonight made me come up with this, quickly put together, tell me what you think honestly.

Reviews

[devon]

I like this a lot! I love the way we see not one point of view, but instead, are given a "tour" of what the city is actually like from many different scenes, many different happenings, and many different people. It's certainly original, and that alone makes it all the better!

"Show the city you're a part of its bones/For the strong survive and make it home," is my favorite line! I like the poetic and metaphoric wording of "part of its bones".

Great job!

:)

[KeeD]

Thanks so much :D I don't think we've met before, Hi I'm Kee, and this was such a sweet review. I'll be sure to return the favor and check out your work. Compliments of the season. xoxo.

[devon]

You are very welcome! And hello, I'm Devon. :) Same to you!

[Euro]

Man...this is awesome! This is really true in our society and you put all of it together beautifully!
I like the part of: "Cops...think" for, like the rest of this work, is true but for some reason it stood out to me the most.
Amazing poem!
-Penelope H.

[KeeD]

Thanks for the awesome review < 3 xox

[Euro]

You're welcome, Keegan :)

[KAOlmsted]

Honestly, I think you've captured the essence of a thriving metropolis...what was that old show, something like there are eight million stories in the naked city...? I felt each stanza had a gripping tale to tell. Well done.

[KeeD]

Thank you so much kimmers! The Naked City, 1958-1963 :D.
I tried to show different angles of what goes down at night in the city I love but i'm afraid to live in. It doesn't necessarily mean the city I live in :P for all those people scared to visit India after reading this, don't be :), Thanks Kimmers, much love.

[Bluefire]

This poem captures the good and bad of city life in an amazing way.
"Show the city you're apart of its bones
For the strong survive and make it home" this line sent chills up my spine. You should be very proud of this poem, it's great! ^^

[KeeD]

thank you so much, you're such a strong supporter of my writing, I'm blessed you have my work shared and viewed by someone as amazing and talented as you. Hope you had a wonderful christmas. compliments of the season

[Bluefire]

It's no problem, I like your writing. ^^
And thanks, I had a wonderful Christmas and hope you did too, have a happy New Year ^^

[kublakhan27]

City lights can be the most illuminating kind, and the most blinding...well put my friend :)

[KeeD]

Thank you, I always look forward to your reviews, after reading your work and just being flat out amazed at what a great writer you are just knowing you even take the time to review my work, let alone read it.. Wow, means the world to me.

[kublakhan27]

I have no words to express how grateful I am for your support...I don't know where I'd find the inspiration without it :D

[Kajal Gulabani]

Lovely! Deep and real.. Deadly combo... Rocker !

[KeeD]

Thank you :) Mumbai, Delhi, its the bitter sweet story of our cities >.

[Kajal Gulabani]

So true.. Yet helpless..

[Coyote Poetry]

I was raised in Detroit as a kid. I didn't fear the city. I was part of the old city. I like the description. A true description of the under-layer of life that roamed the night. I like the complete poem. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[KeeD]

Thank you so much sir, much appreciated . I'll be sure to check out your work in the coming days and Compliments of the season to you.

[Aly]

I like it.

[KeeD]

Thank you, don't think we've been introduced. I'm Kee, I'll be sure to check your work out and repay the kind favor. Compliments of the season, xoxo.

[Aly]

Welcome, and no I don't believe we have. I'm Aly. Thank you, I appericate that and Merry Christamas

[Frieda P]

You really touched upon a lot of different emotions and variants here, I like this one a lot Kee. You're far more talented than you give yourself credit for, and you've only just begun! Kudos my friend.

[KeeD]

Thank you Frieda. You always make my day < 3

[~SouthernGirl~]

This is very well written. I did see a few grammical errors, but they could be easily fixed with a quick reread. I very much liked this, and it's quite interesting, because I honestly have never been to a big city. Wonderful write overall. Best of luck. :)

[KeeD]

any distinct grammatical errors you spotted do let me know,

[KeeD]

i'll correct them immediately my brain is lagging right now due to lack of sleep :D

[~SouthernGirl~]

Um, on the second stanza, there needs to be a comma after sleep, on the seventh stanza there needs to be a comma after crazy, and one the last stanza there needs to be a comma after night. This was very good. Best of luck. Merry Chrismas. :)

[KeeD]

thank you so much ;3

[~SouthernGirl~]

You're welcome. :)