The City at Night

Looking outside my window at night inspired me

  ~~ The City at Night ~~

                                                                           

People walk the roads hiding behind a mask

Only by dusk is their true identity revealed

As a single mother puts her kids to sleep,

She opens a bottle of wine, tastefully

Sending her worries away to the back of her brain

As tonight is the night she logs onto a dating site

To find her soul mate.

As the youth of the city light up the town

They know all the places that are hard to be found

Foods from diverse lands as far as Japan

The city at night can be wondrous land.

Only a true local can understand.

Sitting by the beach, counting the waves

Free in the dark ci-contre to the day that makes us slaves.

Share a beer with a buddy who sets travel next day.

Only at night does the inner child come out to play

But the city can be ruthless too and have its own way.

Girls working for wage by spreading their thighs

Criminals walking the streets in plain disguise

Horrors unheard of can happen in the blink of an eye

For the city is mysterious to poor old oblivious you.

Cops all around making some cash

Young teenagers they sure like to harass

Their word is law; they speak on behalf of the city

Dangerous can it be if your girlfriend is pretty.

Molestation happens more often than you think

For some masks broken shed light on the crazy,

For the right price, justice's vision gets hazy.

Don't you worry though, don't let them scare you

The city protects its own, for

It's a living, breathing, life changing machine.

So if you find yourself out at night,

Don't fear, Arise, alas it is your moment

Show the city you're a part of its bones

For the strong survive and make it home

...In the city that never sleeps.

 

 

Author's Note

Lack of sleep tonight made me come up with this, quickly put together, tell me what you think honestly.

Reviews

[devon]

I like this a lot! I love the way we see not one point of view, but instead, are given a "tour" of what the city is actually like from many different scenes, many different happenings, and many different people. It's certainly original, and that alone makes it all the better!

"Show the city you're a part of its bones/For the strong survive and make it home," is my favorite line! I like the poetic and metaphoric wording of "part of its bones".

Great job!

:)

[KeeD]

Thanks so much :D I don't think we've met before, Hi I'm Kee, and this was such a sweet review. I'll be sure to return the favor and check out your work. Compliments of the season. xoxo.

[devon]

You are very welcome! And hello, I'm Devon. :) Same to you!

[Purva Pathak]

yaar.....hw do u write poems so.....
i mean.....yaar!
sahi me

[KeeD]

I appreciate you reviewing all of my work, means a lot :)

[kublakhan27]

This is an incredible piece for something written so quickly, but it's funny how the best and most vivid ideas often arise from these very circumstances...many times I've found myself writing in the middle of the night, half-asleep, but only half, with every part of my body telling me I should be sleeping, especially my brain haha Keep up the great work my friend, and try to get some sleep ;)

[Eric Cox]

Excellent, takes a person on a journey with nicely created images to the ways of the city.

[Just me]

I like how this encapsulated different points of view along the way, got a little dark through the middle, then added a twist to that with 'the city protects it's own'. But I think what I have really gotten out of this is that I shouldn't write reviews after midnight if I want them to make sense. My original point stands though, I really like this.

[KeeD]

This review was excellent and you've captured the essence of the poem and it's varied aspects. I usually write dark generic stuff, so there will always be a hint of that in most of my pieces :D I say review more after midnight if your reviews turn out to be awesome like this :)

[Broken Soul]

The many points of views presented here really give us an insight to the life of this city. Rather than a one sided view from one person, you gave us sides from every side possible. It's got a great flow to it, making it an enjoyable read. Well done

[KeeD]

Thank you so much, add me up, send me some read requests would love to review your work. Appreciate the kind and honest review. Much love Kee.

[Rob Santana]

Awesome nothing but truth in this one. Good job brother.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

wow great imagery and the structure made it oddly flow better like waves

[KeeD]

wow what a great review, thank you so much! :D

[LouisianaBird]

This had such a cool concept behind it! There was so much cruel raw honest in it, as well. I really enjoyed this, and how it was set up! Lovely write (:

[KeeD]

Thank you so much! Cheers, you're a really good writer yourself.

[PP]

Hey Hey Hey..Never knew sleep deprivation has such a talented side effect!! I LOVE this one..The city never sleeps so do you..I love the way you have brought together so many lives of a single mum, teenagers, the cops...good and bad in a nutshell! You know exactly how to do wonders with your words Kee!

[KeeD]

thank you so much, i loved this review, put a smile on my face :)

[Lilith]

I like this alot I have the same oppinion as Devon there it is very good and I like the description and being led through the town

[KeeD]

Thank you for the review, Glad you liked it. Have an amazing weekend. xoxo - Kee