Silent Killer

music by three days grace "Last to Know"

 Silent Killer

I can see you tear her health apart,

cigarette, cigarette.

Play her lungs like drums

 from the very start

You make grey smoke appear

Cloud her mind, 

make her pain disappear

You block her inhibitions

Fill her head with stressful visions

Yet she breathes you in

You seem like

 the sweetest sin

sin ,sin

Cigarette...

 Cigarette.....

Cigarette......

Cigarette.......

Cigarette ,

 I can feel you off her breath.

Cigarette,

 One last puff of imminent death. 

Malignant threat you consume her

Your abnormal cells infuse her

Cancer you invade her

Cigarette, Oh how you played her..

Cigarette...

Cigarette.....

Cigarette.......

$7.50 repeating, 

Now her life's depleting

This sickness is the end 

One last wish for your sweet embrace

Your bond with her I can never replace

Cigarette , I can feel you off her breath.

Cigarette, One last puff of imminent death. 

Cigarette, I have never given in.

Cigarette, Yet you somehow always win.

Cigarette...

make me...

just  want to...

Die.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Purva Pathak]

speechless.................as usual

[Sarah Redigan]

To bad people cant have the same relationships with other humans as people can with objects ... if we could the world would be loved and needed ♡

[KeeD]

Exactly :) wow've you have reviewed so many poems of my today, i'm flattered. Thank you so much.. I'll have to read more of your stuff and write something about you :D!

[Sarah Redigan]

I enjoy ur mind ... lol ...

[KAOlmsted]

I am a militant ex-smoker, been quit for over a decade, but every now and then...I just really crave a puff. Disgusting habit; vile. Good write.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Wow I love this shows the true evil that lies behind every puff

[KeeD]

Behind each puff & behind every mans heartbreaking bluff. Thank you for taking the time to review this piece, I shall repay your kindness by having a look at your work. - Kee.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Tony]

I like how this reads as if cigarettes were people-- it makes it sound like your talking to a person. In that context i read this a couple of different ways-- one, like your talking to a person that is not good for someone you care for. I mean all you have to do is repalce the word "cigarette" with that persons name and then you can read it that way, know what i mean. And the second way i read this is just like a really cool message about the dangers of smoking cigarettes. Personally, when i read it like it's talking about a person that is bad for someone that is special to you-- it makes it very rivetting and penetrating. Very cool poem anyway you decide to interpret it.

[KeeD]

That is exactly the way I intended for it to be interpreted. The cigarette being a metaphor and also at the same time since most of the people in my family smoke, I just had to have a one on one conversation with a cigarette. Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page. Have an amazing week!

[RoxelanasDream]

I love this poem... despite the fact how depressing it is. For some reason, it reminds me of the song "Feel Good Drag" by Anberlin. The cigarettes tend to not only "cloud her mind", but the guy as well with its constant lure. And the cigarettes are totally effortless in its malignant threat but just as deadly potent to everyone around. Lastly, constantly mentioning cigarettes in your song, makes its so ironically hard to evade. :)

[KeeD]

Thanks for the review, Compliments of the season. I'll be sure to return the favor. Glad you liked the poem :)

[RoxelanasDream]

Look forward to more of your lyrics :) happy holidaysss

[Tex]

I just reviewed this over at Joy's side... loved it... a LOT.

[KeeD]

Thank you so much, much respect and gratitude for the review i'll check out some of your work soon and repay the favor

[Tex]

NP I been following Joy for some time now... just noticed some of your collaborative work and liked what I saw.

[KeeD]

Aww cheers mate, yeah I originally meant to write them as poems, but she has the lyrical gene in her and good placement and ear for music so we ended up making it into a lyrical piece.

[ms. barrie]

you're far too sweet, Keegan, your lyrics are amazing and you picked out this song :) it was a lot of fun to collaborate with you and Adriana again :)

[That_Girl]

"Yet she breaths you in" *breathes

"Maligant threat you consume her" *Malignant

I've always loved poems about cigarettes, mainly cause I smoke and the literal smoke fascinates me. I saw a giant metaphor here, not sure if you were meaning a literal cigarette or a harmful lover...? Regardless, it's well written. Very nice. :)

[KeeD]

haha thanks for catching those, I should really proof read my own writing @_@ :P Thanks for reviewing < 3

[That_Girl]

Not a problem. :)

[ms. barrie]

was probably a typo on my part, Keegan,sorry

[KeeD]

Team effort, team mistakes ;) !

[ms. barrie]

yay! happy eating :)

[KeeD]

i finished now i'm bored and dunno what to do :P

[ms. barrie]

:) just woke up, check out anger, on my page, Adriana and Myself wrote it :)

[Frieda P]

Love this, really I do....love it. Did I say I LOVE THIS?? ;-)

Kudos Kee.....!!!

[KeeD]

you do?:D YAY, I love that you love this, you rock Frieda!

[Frieda P]

I thoroughly enjoyed it while puffing away! I was gonna tell you that it's genius, but you have a BIG enough head already!! ;-)

[KeeD]

LOL hey plenty of more room for you to land kisses. I like the fact that you were puffing away and reading this haha :P

[Frieda P]

hahaha, when smoke gets in my eyes, it's all good! ;-)

[KeeD]

lmaooo