Lufarian's Shroud (Part 3 of the Elise Solberg Story)

Elise continues her journey in hell, will she survive?

Lufarian's Shroud. 

 

Scorching heat as hell's flames arose;

The sound of hounds howling as,

Their blood thirst grows.

The word of a fresh soul has spread around;

The vilest of creatures rise from the ground.

 

Behemoth the fourth, prince of the dark

Arose from his throne and set his mark.

With a goats body and horns of steel

Through a war horn, a vicious roar did he squeal.

"Target the soul of the girl in the shroud;

Break her completely, let her cries be heard aloud."

 

To the east quarter was where Grenth dwell

For Grenth was the most vicious lieutenant of hell.

Out of the shadows his minion appeared

Black widowed spider with the head of a girl.

My Lord Grenth, with news I come forth

 An immaculate girl walks the forsaken corridor.

Rage filled his heart as his eyes burst with glee

Come Annaliese darling, dinners on me.

 

The rightful heir to the throne of hell

Lufarian was the devils son himself.

The beauty of Elise captured his wicked heart

He devised a plan that would crush any counterpart.

He beckoned his sister Lyssa the Cruel

Cut her wrist, and stood in the pool

Blackened blood made a vision appear.

Through it he whispered "Elise do not fear"

"It is I Lufarian, my voice; it shall get you out of here"

 

She followed his voice through a maze of rust and bone

Finally in hell she didn't fell so alone.

The end of the maze was in her sights, she set haste but oh' to her plight

She walked into a web.

A sticky mess,

To her distress, came a putrid laugh,

Followed by a sorrowful caress.

"It is I Annaliese, wench of the east,

It is time for you to die girl, on you shall I feast."

 

She wiggled and screamed, the fear in her eyes;

As the spider was about to devour her life.

Just then a pool of black blood covered her face

Lyssa had suddenly taken her place.

Elise my dear, you are safe and sound

Lufarian has defeated Behemoth and his hounds.

 

Follow the road that leads above ground.

You will find the well in which you have drowned.

Hell has chosen to spit you back out

For a mission you have only Lufarian knows about.

If you are lucky, you should get to thank him.

My brother, my lord, the son of sin.

 

Elise walks the path to the end

Her knees weak, her confidence rend.

Three evils out to finish her soul

Only to be pawn in the prime evils greater goal.

Author's Note

Part 3 of a series of poems about a 15 year old girl and her horrific experiences. Any help, reviews, criticism appreciated.

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

Oh what a great twist! Really good, Kee. Will there be more?

[KeeD]

yes its all up in my head gotta transfer it down to paper though :) part 4 and 5 should come out soon

[KAOlmsted]

I'm there. RR me as soon as. Really good work.

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

I love the imagery in this last stretch. Truly shows you want your readers to see where Elise is and where she could be headed. The web part brought me to the scene in the 3rd Lord of the Rings movie when Frodo is walking through the last tunnel at Mordor. And about the fire in the beginning, I could feel the heat in my mind and the flames. You're so creative...I could never describe such things as this as well as you can.

[KeeD]

xD Wow you read all the parts of this series ? Oh my God "blushes" Thank you! xD I'm so happy you liked it, I still haven't written 4 and 5 but its all up in my head lol.

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

Well, yeah i read the whole parts of this. I couldn't read one and let the other two sit, I wanted to read what happened. The story truly captured me, how did you get the idea for this anyway? I want to know. haha.

[KeeD]

Haha I was having a shower one evening thinking to myself, man i'm so disappointed in horror movies coming out these days, not one single movie that really made me think and feel fear, like Exorcism of Emily Rose and stuff, then I was like thinking of my property in Goa, I have this huge ancestral house with a creepy well behind that has a lot of ghost stories connected to it from back in the day :P so I was like I have to write about that :D

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

Oh, nice. Ghost stories are always kind of the creepiest. But yes, what you've written so far is wonderful and I can't wait to read the rest.

[KeeD]

:) With motivation like you, I should get to writing part 4 and 5 soon! xoxo

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

Haha, thanks. I could be your motivation. Yes??

[KeeD]

Haha yeah with support and appreciation like this, the sky has no limits for me :) xoxo

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

Sounds wonderful, I shall be your personal motivation then :)

[kublakhan27]

I like how you've tweaked the form in every part...like there's a different form for every step of her journey...keep up the good work :)

[KeeD]

thank you :D i'll try not to disappoint, I'll repay the favor by reviewing your amazing work too, gratitude.

[kublakhan27]

You're very welcome :D and feel free to check it out whenever you wish^^

[Andie]

Just like the other two, amazing. :)

[KeeD]

thank you so much, i'll repay the favor and review your talented work as well, Gratitude.

[Andie]

Thank you very much, Keegan. It would mean a lot! :)

[revalatia]

I really love this last chapter of the story the most.. although each was gripping..This one has very strong imagery and I like the images that you got rolling through my mind.. great work dude!

[KeeD]

Haha wicked, thanks for the awesome review. :D whenever you're free and want to bounce idea's, we can totally collaborate a story together, I love this genre and nothing better than bouncing of idea's with someone who's writing has this amazing flow and loves this kind of stuff too. :3

[Eric Cox]

A cool horror write. Excellent tale, cool to read, is interesting and very creatively penned. Hope she can escape eventually or find a good spot in Hell. Cool pen upon this.

[KeeD]

Thank you Eric, oh yes she does escape and without spoiling it, much more intense stuff to come! Thanks always appreciate your reviews. You after all are the master of horror writes.

[Eric Cox]

You're welcome, and thanks!!! Looking forward to more. You're talented.

[Tasha]

This was a wonderful and dark series that I enjoyed very much. Keep up the great work and stop downing yourself, you're a fantastic writer.

[KeeD]

Thank you, Appreciate your reviews very much, i'll get part 4 and 5 out soon :D!

[Tasha]

You're welcome. I can't wait to read them!! :D