Sweet Summer's Eve

Reveal yourself, little pieces at a time...

 

A time never forgotten - the dog days of summer long ago. With our bodies bare and full of mischief we set out in defiance. Unknowingly showing my insecurity, I sprint down the hill, barely recognizing the wet sand squishing up between my toes before diving head first into the cool crisp water, swimming quickly into the deep.

Beth walks leisurely like a Goddess down the slope, attracting and tempting the others, dipping a toe in to test the water, before smoothly gliding in. 

            Glimpses of light through the tree’s signal our time is at an end. We are not alone. 

Author's Note

This was fun... it was written specifically for a drabble contest, a short story to contain exactly 100 words, centered around a keyword {In this case, skinny dipping}.

Reviews

[Craig Bates]

The thing that intoxicated me with this one was your style of prose. I was honestly very close to giving it first place. I loved the idea that their bodies are 'full of mischief' and the use of the term 'dog days'. I'm not sure what it is about it but it seemed to set the tone for the rest of the piece.

Also the idea of comparison between these two characters - the fact that the way they approach skinny dipping says so much about their character - is something that I found very interesting.

Then, the twist, they aren't alone... They say you should always leave the reader wanting more and you definitely do that with this ending.

I'm also glad you found it fun writing a drabble. I think it's a great way to get a story or an idea out there and see what happens. I will probably be doing another competition soon and I'd like you to enter again.

[Wildecat]

Very well done, for 100 words I am impressed. Nice job.

[Bryce Simonds]

You painted the picture very well. I'm sure you could add more to this. Whether you want to or not is up to you though. Good write. Thanks for sharing.

-Bryce