Rethink

"Time flies!" We keep shouting,
While we neglect all necessities.
We mount on the wings of chance
Hoping for a better day to come around.

We work hard doing the wrong thing
Pushing a mountain instead of climbing it.
We keep saying tomorrow would be fine
Until we are totally lost in the past.

Better we drop every luggage and baggage
That's slowing us down along the way
Better we let go things and memories
That never stop hurting us everyday.

I'll keep myself busy with my destiny.
Setting up goal and chasing after it.
'cause I'm sure that time leaves behind
Those who take its presence for granted.

Author's Note

Just thinking about a lot of things.
What do think of this?

Reviews

[Gabby The GAB]

Short but if this was a speech, this would affect me so much. Turning a blind eye to things was what I was doing in the past and just imagine things like it was part of the so-called fantasy like it happened so it happened, but in reality, I was destroying relationships that would have matter more in the end. Sign, regrets.

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree my friend.
"I'll keep myself busy with my destiny.
Setting up goal and chasing after it.
'cause I'm sure that time leaves behind
Those who take its presence for granted"
Today and tomorrow matters. What we are doing is important. Yesterday is done and can't be re-done. Thank you Kay for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Abhilash Hegde]

Very true, time waits for None.
This reads like a callout and a voice that needs hearing.
Good expressions - I like this line,
"Better we drop every luggage and baggage"
We must rid of these to move forward.

A honest write with experiences and hope for betterment.
well written, Thanks for sharing.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much for your thoughtful review, Abhilash.

[barleygirl]

A little bit, it seems your poem is saying it's not a good thing to look back (regretfully), so this narrator is determined to look forward, like it's the better way to go. But this feels like the narrator wants to stomp out a future that can compensate for the past. This ardent dedicated approach -- flinging oneself forward -- it's still connected to the past, a reaction to the past, to all those regrets & memories one might try to push from one's mind.

I sorta disagree. I think living in the moment is the best all around. The past is gone & we can't know the future. We think we know where we are going, like we can plot some deliberate path & that's why we are tempted to speak about "destiny" -- which I think is nonsense. We have so much less control over where our lives are headed than we like to admit. That's why I try to live each day packed full of the actions & thoughts I feel are important to being as good a person as I can be. All the rest is determined by the Grand Painter (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you for your thoughtful review, Margie.
I really appreciate this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really like this poem.
I think of how we let mountains pour their lava on us, cover us with hopelessness, because we let
the past keep us from climbing.
We can't move the past, but we can climb the future.
nicely done, Kay.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much for this precious review, Sir.

[John the Baptist]

This poem describes well the self defeating ways in which people hold themselves back. Dwelling on the past is like sharing a house with a corpse. The speaker gives good advice. Let it all go; let the dead bury the dead.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you for your wonderful review, John.
I'm glad to have you reviewed this.

[Cherrie]

I love the phrase ... pushing the mountain instead of climbing it... that is such a great line. Now that should go on a post card.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much for your comment, Cherrie.
It's really amazing.

[Kari Rakitan]

While it is good to keep moving forward, we cannot completely forget the lessons of our past. The past made us what we are today, the past is part of Time, and we must not take our past for granted either. Otherwise, we are doomed to repeat our mistakes.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much for sharing your view, Kari.
I really appreciate it.

[Ted Kniffen]

Time is of the essence ... nothing more precious than Time ... but it is not totally realized until Time is running short.
Make the most of the Time you have ... you never know when it will run out.
Or, as Brook Benton sang "it's just a matter of time."

Well stated Kay.
Keep safe ... stay well.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much for giving this thoughtful review, Ted.
Time is too expensive to be taken for granted.

[Neville]

Aristole is thought to have said The whole is greater than the sum of its parts' .. I personally think you have penned so many insights into a single four stanza'd poem that you have just proved the old fella write ... I particularly envy you that second stanza .... Stay both safe n well my friend :)

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much on the insight you have on this, Neville.
Stay safe too.

[Neville]

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