You and I

Days have gone behind
when we were Young and strong.
When you softly whispered
telling me I'm the most handsome.

Each time I see the pictures
it stuck me on the past replay.
Where I was standing in awe
looking at your beautiful face.

Some said we won't last together,
other predicted we'll never shine.
They lied in wait to mock our lives,
wanting to see our shame arise.

Though the storm struck on every side
and the wind almost blew us up.
But here we are so old and glad
Still singing the old love song.

Author's Note

Another one about love.

What do you think?

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is a solid love poem that needs no fancy wordplay becuz you show the one most awesome trait about love . . . when it lasts for decades. I feel the way each admires the other & how it's a joyful bragging at the end . . . your words carry these feelings simply & lyrically (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

I love this idea, but the words sound awkward:
"wanting to see a shame arised" --> arise? (to be grammatically correct)
but I don't like that word much . . . shame burns, it simmers or smolders . . .
just ideas!

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Margie.
I'm glad you pick that out.
I'll adjust it.

[poetgurl]

This is so good, I really enjoyed this write

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Kimmie.

[Robert Trakofler]

Grace in the face of the efface and the chase of debase could not erase there embrace:) nice un Kay!!!

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you, Sir Robert.

[Rye]

i think this is kinda uplifting, i enjoyed this write

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Rye.

[Onlyme]

Beautiful passing of time and love, that has grown stronger and lasted throughout the years and people's criticism of your love and bond.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much Dawn, The Storm will strike but it's better we remain unshakeable.

[Chris Shaw]

Such a warm message and an uplifting one too in your lines Kay. This relationship reminded me of my mum and dad, who married far too young amid tittle tattle and whispers. Their marriage was exceedingly happy and fruitful and lasted until my dad's death, at the age of sixty. Thank you for writing this poem and allowing my mind to wander and contemplate on young love and how it can last.

Chris

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

There is nothing as sweet and great as traveling the journey of life with that person you've chosen and never letting each other hands go.
I'm happy for your parents. Only few people maintain that status today.

Thank you for your wonderful review, Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

You are so welcome Kay. Have a good day.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A very uplifting piece as the couple weather all storms thrown their way and still remain. I like the way you use reflection to emphasise the passing of time Kay.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much for your thoughtful response, John.
I so much appreciated this.