John Bull

John Bull jumbled jungle life,
Thinking life is made of trash.
Tumble rumble, now he's dashed,
Learning more to live aright.

Author's Note

I was off the coast lines of life to gather this.
What do you think of it?

Reviews

[Onlyme]

A great short poem, full of great meaning and great images. To envisage the point.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Dawn.
I really appreciate you wonderful review.

[Lydia Shutter]

There's a good rhythm to your words here. I liked the alliteration and onomatopoeia. Good one. Lydi**

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Lydi.
I really appreciate your kind review.

[Li]

This is short but says a lot!! A good poem for impulsive people... well done Kay!!

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you Li.
I'm really grateful for your wonderful review.

[Laura Kate]

I like the tempo it has a really nice beat when said aloud.
Laura

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Laura.
I'm glad you like it.

[Chris Shaw]

I liked the rhythm and alliteration in this short piece Kay. To me it tells a tale of how things aren't always what they seem to be on the surface. Dig deeper for the truth. Nicely penned.

Chris

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Yes Chris.
Thank you for your thoughtful review.

[CD Campbell]

Short but deep. I like the way it rolls off the tongue when said aloud. I like it.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you, CD.
I'm glad you like it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i agree with Margie...one of the best...figurative pieces...the jungle i see here is the city...and having been raised in the Bronx, there is meaning on that level for me.
he was once reckless and going down the wrong street...but now he has been righted...and is on a much more serene and level headed block.
j.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you for your thoughtful review, J.

[Neville]

really loved this.. it kind of gets stuck in the head....

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you for your wonderful review, Neville.

[Neville]

pleasure' all mine :)

[augustus]

Short and sweet! That's how I like 'em!

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Augustus.

[barleygirl]

This is one of the best things you've written that I've read so far. This seems to be far advanced from your usual writing. In the past I notice that you are pretty literal (nothing wrong with that, I also write mostly straightforward) . . . that's why I love seeing you lay down a poem that does not have one literal word in it. I love how you use so few words to conjure up a whole scene & feeling for who & what this "John Bull" might be, tapping into the reader's experience of what kind of trash might be rumbling out of the jungle. I love the way you play with word sounds in a careless way, rather than going for any rhyming structure. Despite sounding like an offhand observation, I feel your poem has a deep meaning -- about appreciating breaths we take & blessings that surround us! (((HUGS)) fondly, Margie

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you, Margie.
You're one part of this advancement. I'm glad you've been correcting me.

[barleygirl]

Thank you . . . the appreciation feels great!