Eye or Mind?

Which sees best?

Eye in front

of the eye lid, sees

what lies within its reach.

Its vision comes from the light,

It receives its sight from the bright

beams. Light off,  sight ceased,

darkness is its worst enemy.

Beholding physical beauty,

Easily ensnared by

Comely things.

Mind behind eye lid,

seeing whatever it could feel. 

Its vision lies on discernment,

 it sees through the fleshy skin.

Light off and eyes is closed, 

It even sees better without

them both. The Beholder

 of the inner beauty,  

always seeing

Through a

million

mile

...

Author's Note

Just trying to do something new with this. Though this is my first picture poem, I hope it makes some sense. And what is your point of view about this matter? Eye or Mind, which one do you think sees the best?

Thanks for your review.

Reviews

[alanwgraham]

Well done Kay. This is very thought provoking. Our understanding of perception is a very complex issue. As you have explained eye and mind are both involved. Your picture method of showing this has worked really well along with your words.
Well done.
Aan

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Alan.
I really appreciate this much.

[Eilis]

The visual presentation made me think of a mirrored image of a tear. One on one side of the glass and one on the other. Very cool. I imagine that took a bit of jigging to get just right.

I do think balance is important in how we view the world. Too much reliance on appearances can mislead us, so employing the powers of the mind’s-eye is definitely important. And then there’s the reality that we can survive without sight, but not without mind. Hmm.

An interesting question you’ve posed here, Kay. I’ll continue to think on it. Good work on this.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you for your constructive review, Eilis.
I'm glad you found my question interesting and I really appreciate it.

[Chris Shaw]

A fine question you have posed here Kay. The layout of this poem most pleasing to the eye. I feel both play their part but those who see inner beauty strike a bright light indeed. Very nicely penned my friend.

Chris

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much for your point of view, Chris.
I really appreciate it

[Fay Slimm]

A wonderful comparison of eye and mind - -I feel the need for usage of both to really see a matter more clearly - -the read makes much sense to me Kay and I love your well-crafted shape-poem - - - - -

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much for your wonderful review, Fay.
I really appreciate it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Love this 'shape' poem and think it is my favourite of yours so far. It poses a question and sets put two options as you explain in the narrative style seeing and thinking. I am a fence sitter on this as we need both working in harmony.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thanks for loving this, John.
I'm glad you really like it.
And thank you also for your thoughtful review.
With the shape, I'm just trying to make something different in look.

[Li]

Perfect depiction of how our imaginations can see far beyond what our eye can, beautifully expressed. And I love the overall shape of the poem, the different color....it's a nice touch.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you for your wonderful review, Li.
I very much appreciate it.

[emmajoy]

' Beholding physical beauty, - Easily ensnared by - Comely things.'
' Mind behind eye lid, - seeing whatever it could feel. - Its vision lies on discernment,'

Immediate interest - that intended hour glass. A reminder that time is made of a myriad of lights and visuals, via varying causes shows how life can be, is. Whether lids up or down, people see what they can. Many see and understand more, far more; others can't or don't want to, perhaps. You've presented thought, hinted at what you feel, believe, do.. and - inspire those who want to explore to pick up one of the threads you've laid. Your writing here is both 'different' in presentation and in the way it touches

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much for this thoughtful review, Emma.
I really appreciate it.

[emmajoy]

Lovely to read, start to finish, Kay

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the hour glass of life...starting out with an idea that flourishes into fulfillment and then winds down to a word.
in poetry length of line is so important, especially in the layout here..
and i like the two poems in one effect...

and yes, the inner beauty is much more important than the outer beauty...
reminds me of Oedipus Rex..who saw much more clearly when he was physically blinded...
what the eyes don't see, the hear and soul still do.
j.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you for your thoughtful point of view, J.
I really appreciate this wonderful words.