Sadness

Silently singing soundless songs,
Hopelessly hymning heartiest hum,
Something saddened, strikingly struck,
Having hazy hearts hardly hung.

Sorry sorries something sorry sourced,
Strongly struggling softening sourly spots,
Sounds so sad, suffering souls scarcely stun,
Solemnly stalking somewhere safe 'n' strong.

Saddened souls strivingly seeking safety,
Heading headway, hoping having hope.
Starving souls searches so starvedly,
Harping helplessly, heedlessly haunting home.

Author's Note

Just felt like writing this..

What do you think?

Reviews

[barleygirl]

It is a rare poem where THIS MUCH alliteration does not feel like slogging thru overkill (& yours does NOT!) There's only one line I don't much like V2-L1 . . . too much sameness on the "sorry" factor. I love the very first & last lines, despite being crazy with alliteration. You do pick words that first convey your message, and secondly, it's about the wordplay (which is how I prefer it) Fondly, Margie

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much, Margie.
I actually wrote this piece intentionally, my mind demanded for it and I had to let it have.
I really much appreciate your thoughtful review.

[John the Baptist]

This one is a hymn to alliteration. The overbearing tone is one of sadness, but no specifics are given. It may refer to a particular human group or to humanity in general. Either way, it is somber.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you for that wonderful point of view.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

As i read your poem i hummed "helplessly hoping" by CSNY I think came to mind lol

A clever poem
one i liked as well, thanks!

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you, Julie.
Just playing with words.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

An inbteresting use of alliteration Kay. You have sought out many in this piece. The first line of stanza one sets the tone well.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thanks so much for this, John.
I'm getting addictive to playing with words nowadays.