Success Could Be Poisonous

Comfort makes men weak,

It makes mind forget the future.

Too much of pleasure is a disease,

That corrupts men focus and ambition.

Prosperity spoils the heart,

If we make it rule our world.

Yes, success makes us relax,

Thinking we’ve got to the highest point.

 

Little pain, little pleasure,

Makes a life to live long.

Success along with failure,

Makes a man to stay strong.

Enjoyment isn’t forbidden.

Merriment is really fun.

But when it's getting too strong,

Then it’s time for deflection.

Author's Note

I'm just trying to reveal a mystery.

What do you think?

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

I think the poet is saying here that though we would like to win all the time, it might not be good for us. Perhaps a setback now and then isn't all bad; it might cause us to reassess ourselves and sharpen our game.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

You are right, John.

[augustus]

You could be pointing a finger at our recently appointed Prime Minister! Mystery solved!

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Really?
Thank you for your point of view, Augustus.

[augustus]

Not that I'm in anyway politically minded!

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Yeah, I understand.
Just noticing what is happening around.

[BlackPrince]

This is absolutely true. This is a truthful reminder to humanity.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you very much, BlackPrince .
It's always been reminder to me as well, telling me never to get too comfortable even at the highest point of success.

[barleygirl]

My over-arching belief is that humans cannot be generalized. There are rich privileged people who do good works & hard work. There are poor people who use that as a poor-me excuse to do nothing. You can always find humans to use to illustrate a point. It is my personal makeup that I NEED to work hard at something or I will turn to mush. I totally believe in what you are preaching, my dear, but I also believe this kind of a message can be conveyed by telling a personal story to SHOW instead of preach. I think humans tend to bristle when you tell them how they should live, even if you're right. But when lured into a lesson by the telling of an irresistible story, I just think this is a better way to persuade in one's writing (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Mentored by this review, I think I have to adjust.
Thank you for your advice, I really appreciate it so much.

Copied that, Margie.
I'll work on myself.

[barleygirl]

I spent my life thinking I knew what other people should do . . . dumb! dumb! dumb! (big regret!)

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you very much for allowing me to learn from your mistake.

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

Very powerful read here, Stress is a silent killer that leads to heart attacks. This is very well said...

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you very much, Kescha.
You are amazing.

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

i don't know about that, but i won't argue.. 😁

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

And that makes you incredible.
That's all.

[Neville]

I think you have hit the proverbial nail on its poetic head.. well thought through and executed.... Neville

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Many thanks, Neville.
I really appreciate your review.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I like the title as it has a softer focus in suggesting success 'could' be poisionous. The freeverse, writen with passion and seeming conviction goes on to advocate that success is bad and failure makes one stronger. Personally I believe there are many who experience sucess and stay grounded and there are many who never have success and manage to carve out a 'happy'existence in poverty. There is no 'one size fits all'!

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thanks for your review John.
I really appreciate your idea.

[Chris Shaw]

Too much of a good thing isn't good. Makes you off guard and to a certain extent vulnerable when things change suddenly for the worse. Appreciate life when it is good, but never take it for granted. Well penned Kay.

Chris

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you for this wonderful review, Chris.
We should always try to balance everything; Not too sad, not too happy.

[Cherrie]

this is a deeply true statement. When things go to good for a very long period, people forget to be diligent.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you for this wonderful review, Cherrie.
That is why many return to their past.