When Love Meets With Peace.

Sunlight subsidizes sight.
Moon makes mind mild.
simple sorry settles skirmish,
making merriment meeting mirth.

Sincere smile salvages spirit,
strongly stopping stubborn sadness.
Solace softens suffering skins,
stimulating several souls soundness.

Segregation suffers sound success.
mislaying men in million miles.
Solidarity secures singleness safeness,
making men much more in might.

Author's Note

My point of view on how I think love and peace should work together in the world of men. (An edited version of one of my old poems.)
What do you think?

Reviews

[adichie]

Some strong alliteration and abstract art in the way love and peace coexist. A kind word turns away wrath, the verse seems to say. The rhyme scheme settles into itself in the second stanza, and echoes the sibilants at the start of most of the lines. It’s like the consonant sounds are saying, shush, be silent. Turn down the noise. The bilabials seem to say, mmm. Taste these words. :):). While you’re tasting, you won’t be hating or fighting.

Artful and enjoyable!!!

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much for this wonderful review, Adichie.
I really really appreciate it.

-: Humble Kay.

[barleygirl]

This is, without a doubt, an overdose of alliteration . . . but since I'm an OCD rhyming thesaurus-flipping fool, I kinda like it! *wink! wink!* At least you didn't grab the simple obvious strings . . . instead it's clear you spent some time playing with words & putting these long alliterative strings together thoughtfully. I also like how your expressions are HINTS of what you're really saying about human nature . . . the crux of SHOW instead of tell, letting the reader take your subtlety in whatever different direction he/she goes with it! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

You really read my mind. I spent a lot of time playing with words to describe my mind and thought and I'm glad it really works.
Thank you for your wonderful review and I'm glad it got your attention.
Thank you so much, Margie.

[Richard🖌]

You asked, "What do you think?"

Well, Dear Poet ✍
What I think is that, until now, I've never read a poem composed almost entirely of sibilance and alliteration … still, your thoughts, feelings, insights, emotions, and message come through loud and clear.

Love and peace accomplishes far more that hate and war, and a simple, "I'm sorry!" has been the beginning that's ended untold numbers of conflicts.

I'd say this amazing poem borders on brilliance, and I am happy to have found it … thank you sincerely, Sir, for sharing! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you so much much for this remarkable review, Sir.
It's been a privilege to have you read my writing.

Thank you so much once again, Sir.

[Chris Shaw]

From the perspective of the world of men and in the climate of today with all its troubles

"simple sorry settles skirmish"

and with smiles

that could go some way to bring about a little peace. You know that saying "from little acorns grow huge oaks". We have to start somewhere. Thoughtful and positive thinking here Kay.

Chris

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Wow! This is very insightful.
Thank you so much, Chris.

-: Humble Kay.
-: Humble kay

[Chris Shaw]

You are very welcome.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

smiles can penetrate sadness...they are necessary...the alliteration is to smile upon in this piece.
j.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Yeah, you are right.
And thank you very much, Jacob.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Love the alliteration in this lovely piece Kay. You take the essence of things and show how peace should be and how to avoid conflict in a few sage lines!

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thank you very much, John.
I wrote this piece, trying to make out something new.

[poetgurl]

Segregation suffers sound success.
mislaying men in million miles.
Solidarity secures singleness safeness,
making men much more in might.

Love this part, this is wonderful. enjoyable read

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

I really appreciate this review, Kimmie.
Thank you very much for understanding its meaning.

[Jade]

a very wonderful write here. enjoyed this

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Thanks Brandie, your writes are also amazing.

[Jade]

thank you, that's nice of you to say

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

It's always my pleasure.