MARRIAGE LANGUAGE

Just a point of view on marriage.

A sign of love is the moon and the sun
That respects each other with no deception.
Moon lights up the night with the aid of sun support.
Sun radiate the day sky without moon malfunction.
Their working together in unity makes them dominate the world.
Though eclipse comes along their way,
 But their affection for each other don’t let them to feel perturb.  

I can hear the voice of a stable relationship loud and clear.
Saying, “People suffer because they don’t know the password to me.
Some thought it’s all about money; some believe it’s all about cash.
But far beyond that, I lie in the heart of understanding.
My beauty is in true love, my healthiness needs tolerance.
If you’re not a good listener, don’t bother to come around me.

Working hand with hand and planning the best together,
 Determines the certainty of the success of you being together,
Being faithful to each other could make me last longer.
And commitment is one of my favorite philosophers.
Search more for my secret and you’ll rarely fall into my trouble.
Be ignorance of me and you’ll wish I never exist.
Some thought I’m cruel, some believe I’m beautiful.
My appearance to you depends on the knowledge you have about me.

Author's Note

Just a point of view on marriage.
What do you think?
Every kind of review will be welcomed.
Thanks.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Actually, this could be a description of any type of friendship, not just marriage. I love how your way of expressing yourself feels authentic & fresh with originality. Lots of people write about love in poetry, but here you've given us your understanding of how these things go. Great use of metaphor & imagery, so you're showing, not just telling. Strong points chosen to emphasize, altho I will say that MONEY is the number one reason couples split (but I very much endorse your POV, that it should NOT be about $$$) Fondly, Margie

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Lot of thanks to you, Barley.
I've never thought I emphasized it that much.
Thank you for that point of view.

[Laura Kate]

The links you make between the sun and the moon, and two members of a relationship is really lovely. I was a little set-back by the line; If you’re not a good listener, don’t bother to come around me, as it followed the line about needing tolerance. I do think this shows your strength of character though as you set your expectations, so this poem seems to be quite personal.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

That's true.
I wrote it out of emotion though I've never married.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

And thanks for the insight.