Dynamism is the inevitable trait of the human condition

Your place in this world

so undefined infinitely

We are what we believe 

ourselves to be

Reviews

[ChemicalMadness]

I've read several of your pieces and thought I'd send a quick comment/suggestion...as this is totally unsolicited advice, I wouldn't blame you for giving little thought to my thoughts.....if you are working towards meaningful poetry (by meaningful, I mean potentially invoking some sort of connection from your readers), I would recommend taking these thoughts you have (some of them have quite a bit of potential) and trying to wrap more of a narrative around them. Use these beginnings as springboards to more complete works where you paint pictures with your words and take your readers to a new place or offer them the world through a new lens. I think you can go much farther. Just my opinion though.

CM.

[Kayli]

Thanks for the advice, it's actually something I've been working on already. These are all much older works, most of which thoughts I barely agree with anymore. I post my newer works on my DeviantArt.com if you're interested. I would love it if you reviewed through them, you have such great constructive criticism. Kaylimh.deviantart.com should be the right link.

[Kayli]

Side note; I haven't written in a while, I haven't had the attempt at this as of yet.

[ChemicalMadness]

I'm blatantly recycling from another review I just did, but it fits here as well, so ill share: If you are writing solely for you, anything you write will have value. If you are writing for an audience, it is incumbent upon you to take them somewhere, to show them your world, to teach them to see with your eyes.

Thank you for your understanding. My "constructiveness" has been misconstrued at times. I appreciate your openness ;)

CM

[Kayli]

I appreciate you taking the time to review. As for the 'indirective' works we are currently speaking of, they're part of an accidental collection. I started writing at a very, very bad time in my life. The confusion in my writing reflected the confusion in my mind. I found myself taking long breaks in-between works, but that turned out to be a good thing. As I grew stronger, the emotional paintings in my works did, as well. My recent work is in much more of a narrative style, and many can connect with them now. Not only did my writing mature from practice, I ended up developing a progressive collection of me becoming the individual I am today. Your words will definitely help me get my point across now, especially since I now know what I want to say. For the longest time, I wanted to erase all of my old writing and start over. I'm glad I didn't, because starting over isn't what tells my story.

[A. Amos]

simply brilliant piece just loved it

[Kayli]

Thank you! I wrote it about 2 years ago. Honestly, I had forgotten all about my writing until I saw you commented.

[A. Amos]

You keep on writing you are good my friend and you're most welcome

[Kayli]

Will do, friend!

[bob, small b. aka invs]

we are what we believe ourselves to be, but only in our own minds. i know a lot of people who believe themselves to be intelligent, yet aren't. or who believe themselves to be artistic, but don't have any talent. or who believe themselves to be superior.... etc.
your poem is well stated, but far from true.

[Kayli]

I'm sure it could go both ways. Depends on the person, depends on the situation. I don't quite agree with this poem anymore, as I wrote it a long time ago at a different time in my life. I keep the old ones to show progress artistically as well as mentally.

[Bare Trees]

True, so true.

[Craba]

amazing write

[Kenaz]

"I believe I am in hell, therefore I am"

[zainul]

Wonderful write