Broken (Please read)

A broken girl with a broken smile

 

She holds on tight for a little while

 

As cold and twisted as life is,

 

this little girl won't give in

 

She sits quiet and never fights,

 

Although, she stands up for what is right.

 

A broken girl with a broken smile

 

She held on tight for a little while.

 

Then one day she couldn't take it

 

Took a knife and didn't fake it.

 

She cried til she died.

 

Can't you see this girl is still broken inside?

Reviews

[Voice]

Great write with a lot of emotions that I know myself...this girl is not alone nor will she ever be...

Voice

[poetic soul]

broken............beyond repair??

lovely write...

Regards,
Poetic Soul

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nice... gave me a sad feeling... your words were so touching... could actually imagine myself in her place.. just one point...
she cried till she died...
so shouldn't it be the girl was broken inside.. but u may be talking about the soul.. so i guess it correct that way...
the emotions poured out... :)
take care and keep smiling.. :)
niki,... :)

[~Unashamed Love~]

I love it, it sent chills down my spine
simple but effective, also love the rhymes!
great job, keep it up!
=)

[~Mary Ann~]

Oh what a sad story with such a tragic ending!!! She was broken and no one noticed to give a helping hand? Or so quiet that she faded in the shadows? Hearbreaking emotion that one feels to know a girl lost... broken crying tears of broken dreams...

Well done! :)