Innocent Coward

She hid in caves her whole life,

Looking at the stars and wondering;

Dreaming they could whisper secrets

If she could open her ears to listen.

 

She hid from the sun in hollowed crevices,

Scared it would show her for what she was

In a way that the flickering candlelight

Never seemed to do.

 

She passed old lanterns to travelling souls,

Wanderers passing with hollow pretence.

Fools too sure of the path to know

That it had to be wrong if it felt that right.

 

She dreamt of escape from the echoing vault,

Of emerging as somebody who’d never seen darkness

But to emerge into sunlight took more courage

Than this innocent coward could find.

Author's Note

I don't know if this really counts as a poem... it doesn't rhyme and my poems usually rhyme. It sorta just came out... My fingers were itching to type something... This just happened to come out. As always comments of any kind very welcome! :)

Reviews

[FJ Davis]

While written in the third person, this excellent creative outburst appears to be part of a conversation with yourself; its actual and complete meaning, known only to you--even if, mostly, on a subconscious or unconscious level.
"Innocent Coward" strikes me as very fine poetry.
That third stanza is especially intriguing. Here, the poetess seems to indicate that feelings based on practiced sin or too-easily accepted error can often seem quite "right." Otherwise, a well-tuned conscience--having been meticulously programmed with as much truth as was available--would have, long ago, sounded the alarm.
Now, Kaya, I'll obviously have to add "thought-provoking" to my assessment of your very fine poetry.
Extremely promising work!

[The Watcher]

This is a beautifully written poem! It has good imagery and strong emotions as well. Poems don't have to rhyme to be wonderful, and this is a perfect example of that statement. Kudos to you!

100/100

[Kaya]

Thank you so much! :)

[The Watcher]

You're welcome anytime Kaya! You write wonderful poems. =)

[Pax]

its a narrative poem. you did it in such careful way like a poem, this poem has emotions..and you did very well in telling a story out of it. great job.

[Kaya]

Thanks :)