Romancing The Devil: Chapter Three

Chapter Three.

"1... 2.. 3.. GOO!!" Reff yelled.

Round three is always the worst. Especially when the score is tied. A thousand dollars and my pride and dinner with Camron is on the line and no way in hell is anyone taking that away from me.

Get your head in the game I told myself. Carla and I are circling each other, waiting for one of us to go in for the first move.

At lot is on the line for me, I tell myself. Losing is not an opinion. I strike the first move. I go In with a left fake punch to the arm, and use my right arm to really attack. Then quickly step back, giving me time to readjust.

Carla is panting, and I'm short of breath from circling around the ring. I decided to go in for the winning hit. All or nothing. I use both of my arms and go in for a couple of jabs, then I use my legs to trip her. As she falls, I get on the floor to pin her down.

I hear the reff say, "BOE'S THE WINNER." And the crowd hollers and screams my name. I was gloating with happiness. Excited for that dinner Camron owes me.

Ethan Is first to greet me. Bringing me towels and water. He congratulates me on the win tonight. The whole time I have my eye on Camron watching me sitting in the same place he always sits in with his friend.

I head over the the Boss Man, that's actually his real legal name, Boss Man. To collect my money, and he tells me to be back in two days for another torment.

Ethan leaves to go to the bathroom. While Im filling up my water bottle.

"Nice fight Boe." I jumped about ten meters in shock and dropped my water bottle.

"Goodness! " I exclaimed. "I didn't even hear you!" Camron is leaning against the wall behind me. He chuckles, and reaches down to pick my now emptied water bottle.

He hands it over to me, while never breaking eye contact. His skin gazes my arm, and I gasp at cold it feels.

"You must be freezing.." I mumble. His eye brows raise, and he puts his hand over my hand, the same one that's holding the water bottle. His chest gets close to my back, he presses to turn the water fountain on with his free hand.

"Here, let me show you how to get some water." He whispers onto my neck, now his chest is fully up pressed up against my back, and I let out a sigh. His head resting on neck.

The bathroom door opened and I jumped away from Camron in fright. He looked at me with confusion.

Ethan came out looking at Camron with a scowl.

"Ethan, What's wrong?" I got a bad feeling in the pit of my stomach. Ethan grabs my arm and pulls me behind hind and growls "Get away from her." I tug on his arm and tell him to stop. That Camron won't hurt me.

Camron has a very pissed off facial expression, and he starts coming closer to Ethan, with his friend not far behind.

I jump In between the two boys, hoping they won't squash me trying to get at each other.

Author's Note

FEED BACK PLEASE. I have had no comments, or anything. Im worried this story is going in the direction;.

Reviews

[Dutch Jr.]

So, a few things, your fight's rules seem to be a bit different from the conventional way. Which is fine, but I would suggest letting your reader know in the beginning the object of these fights. Typically fights end in a KO or a tapout, but it doesn't seem like either happened in the rounds of this fight. They seem to be just a couple of blows thrown, and then one is knocked to the ground, and the round is over.

Second, it could just be because I'm a guy, but the whole "guy embracing the girl from behind, here let me show you how to do it" seems a bit cliche. I've seen it in too many movies, books, etc. I would avoid cliches as much as possible, as they degrade the story's distinction and originality. Although cliches are avoidable in some situations. I feel that you can find another way to show Camron has an intimate interest in Boe, without the whole "let me show you how to get some water" thing.

Good story progression, nonetheless and we witness the emergence of hostility between Camron and Ethan. Seems like a good way to go. Spices things up a bit. Makes me wonder if Ethan knows something about Camron, or if he just wants her for himself.