Missing

I wish I could vapor like water from bowl,
Newspapers would call me "missing"...
No need for whole body, enough just a hole
For cigarettes and for kisses.

Reviews

[Alessander]

Wow. Concise but impactful.


What intriguing ideas in such a compact poem.

I get this image of a floating mouth smoking and kissing while the body is evaporating.

Surreal.

Cool stuff.

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Magic moment of your life. Recorded in your creation. Wonderful.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Whoa! So deep...and beautiful.
The overall idea I think is freedom...
I love your style!

[EJ's Horror]

This is nice! I would say I have a problem with "from bowl" but if it stuffs up the syllable count, better just leave it. You are a creative person and your poems reflect that

[lostinthewaves]

Lots of emotion in just a few short lines. I enjoyed this very much. Thanks for sharing your talent!