Butterflies Faires

Poem

Blue butterflies dance across my mind.
I see no end to this time.
There he stands 
arms reaching out for me.
Finger tips dance across my skin
And Butterfly fairies kiss my lips.

Oh these wonderful dreams fill my heart.
Filling it up to the brim.
Flowing through out my body
To the tips of my toes and the top of my head.

I feel the cool breeze playing in my hair
And him whispering in my ear.
Sing to me those sweet nothings.
Whisper to me those kind words.

My heart flutters like the blue butterflies
My heart sings like the morning bird.
And there he stands
Smiling at me
Across the blue, blue pond.
Arms spread open for me.

Butterfly Fairies swim in my mind
Telling me to go on.
They push me closer to the waters edge
And then it happens

My feet glide over the crystal waters
The fishes tickle my toes.
And I can just see him
As I get close.

Then the dream ends
Everything is gone
The Butterfly Fairies
And my prince charming.
No more do I see them
No more do they play my mind
But deep in my heart
They are there for the end of time.

Author's Note

Crit.?

Reviews

[Adrian K. Smith]

At first, I wanted to say that I was thrown off by the "fishies"; but I read through it again, keeping them in mind. It actually added to the dreamlike sensation of the piece. I enjoyed the lack of forced rhyme that is woefully common to so many poems, and I seriously enjoyed the spaced repetition of key words that gave it a poetic feel. They along with the dreamy feel gave it a rhythm that is not forced, but simply there to be experienced.

[Tomás Ó C..]

The iamgery of the butterfly for kisses and dreams show the flletingness of love that is well expressed in the poem.

[Larissa G.]

"

Oh these wonderful dreams fill my heart.
Filling it up to the brim.
Flowing through out my body
To the tips of my toes and the top of my head."

I would cut that stanza entirely. It's too blunt; it doesn't go with the rest of the poem.
Let your beautiful images speak for themselves and make your point for you.
But like I said; otherwise it's quite beautiful.