Sweetness

A poem for you poets.

Your touch lingering

As I melt your gleaming skin

Honey becomes me.  

Author's Note

A poem for you poets.

Reviews

[KeeD]

The aftertaste of this poem lingers on the mind, if I was diabetic i'd be in a coma right now from all the sweetness this Haiku radiates. This is a very personal and very sensual poem to me as I perceive it's essence I understand what it means to me and I blush.

[Katiya K]

Hahaha oh my! Maybe you should be the poet and not I!
Ah so you know the very core of this poem - I'm glad :)

I feel accomplished when I can at least get some sort of reaction from a reader so thank you!

[Luke L]

Lovely beautiful stuff :) I like your writing a lot!

[Katiya K]

Thank you very much! :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Short and crisp loved thee way you supported everyone here :)
Thanks again for the share :) Katiya :)
- Singh :)

[Katiya K]

Thanks for the lovely comment Singh!

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice use of words. Create a solid poem using so few words. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Katiya K]

Thank you for reading it and I'm glad you enjoyed :)

[Mike Cole]

So short but it really makes me think because it interests me how you can be so descriptive or leave such powerful thoughts with only writing 3 lines. Very Good

[Katiya K]

thank you :) glad you enjoyed it

[DJ]

Beautifully written, short and simple but the words stay with you long after they are read. I like the way you use honey to describe touch, very well done.

[Katiya K]

Thank you :)

[Clockwork]

I've always liked honey and images involving honey. What I think is interesting about how you use it here is how you combine it with that touch. Using it in combination with touch gives us the incite that physical connection is very deep, very warm. It heats up everything inside the speaker, until she becomes light and radiant like the melted honey.

[Meowllory]

I was thinking the exact same thing, this poem is simple but with so much depth.

[Katiya K]

Clockwork, yes exactly! :) Honey is so sweet and I just love the way it lazily drips from the bottle. In other words, I'm glad my poem has inspired so much thought from you! Thank you for taking the time to read.

[Ravyne Hawke]

Beautiful senryu, Katiya.. and thank you, a lovely sentiment for us poets.

[Katiya K]

I appreciate your wonderful comment lori :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

You know this is nice after reading longer excerpt from others here... I had to do the 575 in my mind... the two words that catch me: lingering/gleaming... I've not done a Haiku in years... almost forever...

[Everett DeValle]

A very Sweet imagery...I truly enjoyed reading your poem.

[Katiya K]

thank you :)

[Everett DeValle]

You are very welcome.