Prologue: The Tale

Prologue: The Tale

A Chapter by Katiya K
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Introducing two important characters: Grandmother and Ariana.

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            During the summers, I would go to stay with my grandmother in the country. She owned a beautiful cottage near the foothills of the mountains, completed with a babbling brook and her own small garden, where she grew lettuce, tomatoes, potatoes, carrots and green beans. The story was that Grandmother had obtained the house when she was a little girl by playing a game with the Old Witch in her village. Grandmother had believed in magic ever since she was a little girl. Old magic, fairies, and talking animals often became the subject of Grandmother’s favorite tales to tell. But the one of how she won the little cottage from the Old Witch was the best tale to be told.

            It began not with once upon a time, since time was endless for my Grandmother. “Time seemed endless for the Old Witch too. She had been around since my Grandmother’s great Grandmother.” My Grandmother said drawing a line in the air that represented our lineage. “Or so it seemed.” Grandmother laughed. “But it was a known fact amongst the villagers that the Old Witch had been around for ages. She had always lived at the foothills of the mountains. Perhaps she was even born there. None of the villagers could be sure exactly what the Old Witch did up there all alone but she always seemed to turn up when the people needed her the most.” My Grandmother looked down at me, all wrapped up in red and blue alpaca blankets from the Alps, to make sure that I was still listening and had not dozed off. “See, little one, that was what made the Old Witch magical.” Grandmother tucked the loose edges of the alpaca blanket tightly around me and then continued, “One summer, all the villager’s crops were killed by disease or had eaten by the wild animals. No one knew what to do. The whole effort put into growing and raising the crops was gone in a matter of seconds. If there was no food to be eaten then the villagers risked a famine. That was their dilemma "“

“The Old Witch becomes the hero?” I interrupted. To help my five-year-old mind understand the complex stories my Grandmother always told me, I was given a method to help distinguish the plot from her ramblings. There was always a hero, big or small, and there was always a dilemma, big or small. That was how a story was made. Grandmother laughed at my eagerness to understand this particular tale. “The Old Witch a hero? Well, I had never thought of it that way. But I agree with you, little one, the Old Witch was the hero in this particular tale, although the villagers probably never saw it like that. See, little one, the Old Witch was different than the rest of the villager folks. She knew ancient knowledge that had been passed on from her ancestors only by listening to the land. She also knew magic, little one, real magic. Perhaps that was why she was neither young nor old. It seemed the Old Witch was stuck at the perpetual age of a maiden who had seen her youth slip by but was still holding on to it for dear life. It was said that if you stood at different angles and looked at her she appeared to be only a little girl. Maybe magic was also the reason why the Old Witch could materialize whenever the villagers where in peril. To the children in the village she was a mystery that could only be accepted by the fact that she was indeed a Witch. But the adults in the village could not accept the fact that she was a Witch. So they feared her and the fear led to hatred. Only when the Old Witch came to save them did they believe that the she could be left to her own devices at the foothill of the mountain,” Grandmother paused for the question, which she knew was bursting from the seams inside me.

But Witches can’t be real, Grandmother, can they?” I blurt using the blanket to hide myself behind.  

“Witches are real, little one. You just have to believe it so.” Grandmother pulled the blanket away and shook her head. “Listen to my story. Magic is real. And that was why only the children could see her as a Witch and accept her as one. Children open their hearts to magic, little one, because their hearts are still new and not tarnished by darkness of the world.” Her face became grave and it was times like this where I could no longer understand what the tale had become or why it had shifted into something far more darker and deeper than anything I could ever understand at such a young age. Grandmother turned away to stare at the crescent moon that was peaking through the oscillating gold curtains in my bedroom. “But Witches are neither good or bad until they are consumed by their own personal desires. It was difficult to tell whether this Old Witch was consumed by her own desires when she always showed up to help the villagers, little one."

" But one thing was certain and that was no matter what happened, whether the villagers hated her, despised her or threatened her, she always came to help them. That summer when the crops didn’t produce any fruit and the villagers were growing fearful of their fate, the Old Witch appeared in village square where the Councilmen were counting what was left of the dried fruits and vegetables from last year’s crops. The Old Witch appeared out of thin air and was standing patiently next to a small family and widower, both of which failed to recognize the Old Witch’s materialization. I was playing with some cousins by the fire, singing songs of the wild beasts. We also failed to recognize the Old Witch’s materialization and carried on with our songs and games. When the Councilmen finished their counting and the final sweat had fallen from their brows, the Old Witch stepped forward. The fire jumped alive and crackled and blazed brighter than it had before. The children stopped playing and gathered around the skirts of the Old Witch unafraid and ready to listen to the advice she had to say. The villagers on the other hand had shied away from the Old Witch too afraid to usher their children away. 

"The Councilmen tried to be respectful although they were nervous. Each bowed low and greeted the Old Witch who silently acknowledged them. Then there was silence. The Old Witch could only offer her wisdom if the villagers asked. Finally the youngest and bravest Councilman stood up and walked towards the Old Witch, who was looking older and older in the flickering of firelight. Dear Old friend, he said. Please help us we don’t know what happened to our crops that we worked so hard on. Please tell us what we can do. The villagers who had shied away held their breath hoping the Old Witch would not turn away from them just as they had turn away from her. Dear son, I will help you solve this dilemma with the crops, the Old Witch said. But I must ask for a favor in exchange for my wisdom. The villagers began to murmur and the young Councilman was stunned. Not ever in the history of the village had the Old Witch asked for help from the villagers. The Councilman was quick to answer, anything you might need just ask us and we will give it to you, he said. The Old Witch nodded her head and spoke her favor; I need a child, a little girl to take back with me to the mountains. The Old Witch’s request was met with silence and then quite dangerous outburst. The villagers began to scream at her while the children who sat by her feet stared up at her with rapt attention. To the village children, the possibility of going with the Old Witch meant a whole new adventure and quickly they all pleaded to go. Except for me. I was afraid, little one. Even though I loved magic and I loved the Old Witch for allowing magic to come alive I could not bring myself to jump and clamor like the other children did. I only felt that I was not the one to go. I quickly ran away to find my mother and when I reached her and hid behind my mother’s dress I found the Old Witch staring at me with her ice blue eyes and feared that she would raise a gnarled finger and point to me, sealing my fate. 

"But the Old Witch did no such thing. Instead she raised both hands and a cold silence evaporated the screams and shouts right from the villager’s throats. The children became silent and still. When the child is ready I will take her with me. But she has to be ready and willing. It will not be now or in the near future but the favor will be paid in time. And the favor must be paid. The Old Witch looked at me again with those chilly eyes and a tremor went up my spine. When the villagers were ready to listen again the Old Witch told the villagers how to cleanse the land and told them that she would help stretch the summer sun and watch over the growth of the new crops. In a short time new crops grew twice as large and juicy as it had before the last summer and the villagers rejoiced and had forgotten the request of the Old Witch. But even though I was still a little girl I had not forgotten about that night the Old Witch requested for a favor. So one day when I was out picking strawberries in the field and had strayed far from the other children when the Old Witch materialized in front of me. This time I did not run away to my mother and instead greeted her with a curtsy and offered her some strawberries from my basket. I told her I was ready to go with her, for I had thought she had chosen to take me away. The Old Witch smiled and in that moment I have never seen anyone so youthful and beautiful and full of sunshine in my entire life. The Old Witch walked towards me and gently lowered my outstretched hands with the basket of berries. No child, she said. I have not come for you. I have realized, that although you are the perfect one to take with me to the mountains, that you are meant for a greater purpose. Confused, I waited for her to go on. The Old Witch sat down next to me so we were almost eye-level. See child, you have a wonderful talent inside of you that is just like magic. You don’t know what it is yet but it is important that you realize it soon. So I have come here to play a game with you, said the Witch. Being young like yourself little one, I was confused by her words but as soon as she had said she wanted to play a game everything fell into place in my tiny brain. I nodded my head and agreed that I would play this game with the Old Witch. Delighted, the Old Witch reached into the folds of her dress and pulled out a wooden carving of a bear and a house. If you win this game child, I will let you have my little house on the foothills of the mountain, said the Old Witch. I was sure I didn’t hear her right, none the less, I had agreed to play the game with the Old Witch.” Grandmother paused for a breath and smiled down at my little drowsy face.

            “What game, Grandmother?” I asked while failing to banish the sleep from my eyes.

“The telling tales game, little one. I beat the Old Witch by weaving a single tale that was so great that the Old Witch was left speechless. That was how I won the little house from the Old Witch. Now go to sleep, little one, and I will tell you the Great Tale I had created to beat the Old Witch at her own game another time.” Grandmother stood up and carried me to the little cot that housed my stuffed animals and pillows. She laid me down gently, kissed my forehead and shut the gold curtains tightly before whispering good night. 



© 2013 Katiya K


Author's Note

Katiya K
Note: I just separated some paragraphs. I didn't do an in depth edit because I am quickly writing a chapter of my other book, Cloud Castle. Once I finish I will go back and definitely shorten parts of where Grandma is telling her story and make it more clear when who is talking. Originally I wanted it to seem like once the Grandma is speaking a story book appears...but I'll work on that haha. Thanks for reviewing :) I'll return the favor.

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This is good I really enjoyed it and cannot wait for the next chapter! On another note it was VERY difficult for me to read as the type was very small, also when the grandma is telling the story it was hard to understand when the people were talking in the story. Maybe if you write it like this, 'Hi' he said, inside of the quotations of the grandma talking, it would be easier. Also maybe find a break in the really big paragraph as i kept getting lost in it. Just a few little things that will make it easier to read, but I loved the story! Great Job!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Katiya K

11 Years Ago

thank you so much for the review! It was really helpful :) I will work harder.



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OMG! I love everything about Witches and I wrote lots of stories about them that I'm going to post in here. You wrote an amazing Prologue and I can't wait to read more!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Katiya K

11 Years Ago

Thank you for the read Kejara! I can't wait to read your stories about Withes as well since I haven'.. read more
Did you have something in mind as far as more development or shall I wait and see? I did enjoy this, it can be taken so many ways and yet familiar.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Katiya K

11 Years Ago

Moriarty, thank you for taking the time to read this! I have a general idea for it so far which has .. read more
As you said, you did not do an in depth edit. Hopefully when you have time, you will fix the paragraph lengths and dialogue structures. Although the lack of editing did make the story more difficult to read, I still understood the whole story. It is difficult to weave two tales into one but you are doing just that with this story. The Old Witch is a character that was created very well. She portrays an element of mystery and exposes human's fear of the unknown. It will be interesting to see the plot develop more. Well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Katiya K

11 Years Ago

Thank you for this very helpful review! I will look into everything you mention because I know it wi.. read more
Like the previous reviewer mentioned, your piece needs some major re-organising O.O

Looooong paragraphs are the last thing you want to have in a story because:
1. It's obviously very difficult to read.
2. Readers get lost in the forest of words and might not pick up where they dropped off :p

I have encountered this kind of issue with most writers, eventhough it has great content and plot, they will lose out to the major impression they formed in the first place. Like in real life, you get attracted to physical grooming and appearance before you observe their inner beauty.

Other than that, I believe this piece should do quite well. Also, leave some spacing between paragraphs.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Katiya K

11 Years Ago

Thank you for the detailed review :D

I got a little carried away in the story telling .. read more
Decanter Red

11 Years Ago

You're welcome :)

We all get carried away at one point (or several) in our lives so no .. read more
very professional.one,awesome

Posted 11 Years Ago


Katiya K

11 Years Ago

thank you :)
This is good I really enjoyed it and cannot wait for the next chapter! On another note it was VERY difficult for me to read as the type was very small, also when the grandma is telling the story it was hard to understand when the people were talking in the story. Maybe if you write it like this, 'Hi' he said, inside of the quotations of the grandma talking, it would be easier. Also maybe find a break in the really big paragraph as i kept getting lost in it. Just a few little things that will make it easier to read, but I loved the story! Great Job!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Katiya K

11 Years Ago

thank you so much for the review! It was really helpful :) I will work harder.

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