Thin Screen

Just a song

You dive right in
To drown yourself
But the water hits me
And it wakes me up
The drops on my face are as cold as ice
As you sink to the bottom I realize what I wanted
And I want it
I float on the surface and look up to the sky
And the stars with you
Beneath me
How can you breathe?
How can you do what you want without thinking about what could go wrong
Till it goes wrong?
How can you do what you want without thinking and fearing
And wasting your time on the meaning of life
And trying to be right
And getting it wrong
And using up your chances till they're gone?
The next time that I go with you
I'm gonna jump from an airplane without a parachute.
You've got the wind in your hair and the sun in your eyes
As you're falling rapidly you realize that I'll catch you.
I don't get you.
I float on the surface and look up to the sky
And the stars with you
Beneath me
How can you breathe?
How can you do what you want without thinking about what could go wrong
What could go wrong?
How can you do what you want without thinking and fearing
And wasting your time on the meaning of life
And trying to be right
And getting it wrong
And using up your chances till they're gone?
I'm on the surface
But I need to go deeper
Break this thin screen
That keeps me for being with you
It keeps me from being like you.
I'm sinking deeper and looking to the surface
Of the water with you
Beside me.
And we don't breathe.
I float on the surface and look up to the sky
And the stars with you
Beneath me
How can you breathe?
How can you do what you want without thinking about what could go wrong
I was so wrong.
How can you do what you want without thinking and fearing
And wasting your time on the meaning of life
And trying to be right
And getting it wrong
And using up your chances till they're gone?

Reviews

[Ashira Macy]

I personally think this would make a lovely song. I would suggest putting in stanzas so that we can tell where the verses are. I really liked how this was not just speaking about your own journey to find yourself, but also of a loved one's as well. We often have someone who seems to sure of themselves in our lives, but you never know, it could be that they feel the same way about us. Great job my friend, this was a fantastic read.

[Eliott]

Thank you so much! I keep trying to put stanzas and paragraphs but the formatting doesn't transfer on my phone. But it actually is a song, I play the piano with it.

[Ashira Macy]

How wonderful! If you ever end up putting it on youtube or soundcloud let me know, I would love to hear it.

[Eliott]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oROb_SWfpEY&list=UUO0nX-oLuJLUQqE-6yGHT8w

[Ashira Macy]

Wow, it is gorgeous! I would love to here it with the lyrics. I bet it would sound all the better. Do you sing?

[Eliott]

Not really

[Ashira Macy]

Well no worries. You can always find a singer. Really gorgeous my friend!