demons

demons

A Poem by Katie Louise

Fragile little thing, so broken and scarred,
No one ever told her life would be so hard.
Faking smiles, and crying herself to sleep,
No one wants to know about the demons she keeps.

Fragile little thing, she's so scared on her own,
Surrounded by people, but couldn't feel more alone.
She wants to tell someone, but her walls are built high,
So she waits, and she wishes, for her demons to die.

Fragile little thing, so tired and lost,
Striving to be beautiful, but at what cost.
She bargained her life, and starved for perfection,
Just to be content when she see's her reflection.

Fragile little thing, running out of ideas,
Growing tired of fighting her war all these years.
She's got cuts on her wrists and cuts on her thighs,
But they're nothing compared to the damage inside.

Fragile little thing, she want's to be dead,
Her demons are screaming and it's hurting her head.
She's completely exhausted and can no longer cope,
She's lost all her fight, and all of her hope.

Fragile little thing lying cold on the floor,
With a slit on each wrist, wounds from her war.
Her head got too loud, and she gave up the fight,
This fragile little thing lying dead in the night.

© 2014 Katie Louise


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I thought the repetition of the words "fragile little thing" was a great idea, and I thought your poem was great. The only possible critique I have is where it says, "She she waits" could be changed to "So she waits". The last two lines, "Her head got too loud, and she gave up the fight, this fragile little thing lying dead in the night." got to me and made it all seem more real.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.



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I love this - the repetition is great and really quite effective. The rhyme is spot-on too. Everything about this just works!
The emotion is raw and strong and expressed so well. A powerful poem.
Really well done

Posted 10 Years Ago


hits deep, powerful message expressed in great poem.
I really enjoyed your style and the way it was wrote.
Thank you

Posted 10 Years Ago




You give me heartbeat, and my heart goes out to you
Thank you for sharing
I truly love your style

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I thought the repetition of the words "fragile little thing" was a great idea, and I thought your poem was great. The only possible critique I have is where it says, "She she waits" could be changed to "So she waits". The last two lines, "Her head got too loud, and she gave up the fight, this fragile little thing lying dead in the night." got to me and made it all seem more real.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Such a terrible fate to be gripped by. The bodily turmoil one goes through is horrible. Well written poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very sad....how many souls fall victim?
Well expressed..

Enjoyed it.
Scott

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Added on December 28, 2013
Last Updated on January 3, 2014
Tags: depression, eating disorder, life, struggles

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Katie Louise
Katie Louise

Busselton, Western Australia, Australia



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