Ferro Rocher

It's my first haiku , thought i'd try it out !

Popping in that Rocher 

The lingering taste of the chocolatey disks

it’s a sweet heavenly bliss

-----Haiku ( My first one ) 

Author's Note

Is it any good ? ..

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

A nice bit of tasty brevity. Chocolate and nuts whipped to a delicious frenzy. Melt in the mouth heaven. I also love Lindor chocolate. Yummy.

Chris

[Kathy Mc Cathy]

Absolutely delicious ..thanks Chris for dropping by

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Love this I’m not supposed to eat chocolate but do have my Lindt 85 percent dark block in fridge for a pick me up
Love your poem

[Kathy Mc Cathy]

Nice , I love me some dark chocolate too , have a gr8 Halloween Julie !

[barleygirl]

For me, it's Lindor truffles, of which I have a large box to see me thru Halloween! *wink! wink!* This is a perfectly sturdy haiku, especially for a first one, expressed thru imagery. For me, however, a phrase like "lingering taste" is not really very sensual. I'd like to see a highly sensory write that includes all the senses . . . how does it taste? how does it feel? how does it smell? . . . describing chocolate as "chocolatey" is like describing milk as being "milky". You can do better than that. Dig deeper! Still, it's a far cry better than most first haikus! Have a fun Halloween weekend (((HUGS)))

[Kathy Mc Cathy]

Thanks Margie for dropping by , really appreciate the tips u gave ... Have a gr8 Halloween 🎃 :))
Love Kathy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, structure is 5-7-5 as Dylan said....also this is Senryu...Haiku is strictly about nature.

regardless....this is tasty!

[Kathy Mc Cathy]

Ohh right yess thanks Jacob ... Well chocolates usually are :))
Thanks for the tips Jacob :))

Kathy

[Dylan Macadham]

Love those gold-wrapped chocolates, you've described the popping-in experience wonderfully,
which makes this a most flavorful first-one.
For your second, try taking a shot at the traditional 5-7-5 syllables structure :)
Thank you,
for your Haiku.
~Dylan :)

[Kathy Mc Cathy]

Yeah they re so good , like dark chocolate .. ohh yeah sure , thanks for the tips :))
Have a nice Thursday !
Thanks for posting such lovely ones , got me inspired :))
Kathy :)).