Remember...?

Nothing lasts forever...

Remember I dialled your number that December night?

You picked up with shock, your voice sounded tight,

But I heard you smiling; your eyes held a light.

Remember when you pressed "send" for that text?

I sat on my bed, reading, thinking: what would be next?

My dancing heart pounded against my chest. 

Remember that time you whispered it was "just us two"?

Your eyes gave a laugh, your lips gave a coo,

The place was loud and blustering, but I saw only you. 

Remember when you flew in with those skinny jeans?

You tripped over once, laughed, then took out your things,

I stared mesmerized at your heavenly wings. 

Remember the trio of ukuleles playing?

"Just us two again," I remember you saying,

But your tone was odd, your voice betraying.

Remember those steps we walked down together?

I asked you to come but your heart echoed "never",

Suddenly I knew I couldn't have you forever.

Remember the words you said as we passed each other?

It was raining tears that day and I ran under cover,

The thunder crackled at the shattered lover.

Remember when you walked much further away?

Your head was bent down, then you looked the other way,

I stared at your hair, there was nothing left to say.

Remember that stony look you cast me that day?

Your movements were robotic, as if you were clay,

I nodded a silent "hi" and went out of your way.

Remember... no you don't remember whatever came after,

Well, I'll tell you now, there was no more laughter,

And then I found out about it... long, long after...

Remember when we met in the corridors?

Your eyes taunting and you whispered without pause,

"I was never yours, and I will never be yours." 

Author's Note

This poem is based on true experiences and emotions... My first attempt at using rhyme. Please review and tell me what you think :)

Reviews

[Lee Foreman]

This poem put me right at the setting, as if I was living it. I really liked the rhyme as well.. Reading the poem and using my own imagination, I felt as if the two were having an affair, and the guy decided to end it.. I really enjoyed reading this!!

[Katho28]

thank you for reading and reviewing! :) glad you enjoyed it.

[William J. Marsh]

I have been treated that way myself. It hurts me to know that someone broke a heart so tender as yours.
It's hard to say that I love this piece knowing the pain that brought it to my reading eyes and feeling soul.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I love how you have rhymed every 3 lines and then to a new paragraph.
Its different i like different.
It was well writen and it flowed well.
Defiantly came from your heart.
Romantic and emotional write.
Great poem...

Cimmy :)

[Katho28]

thank you so much for reading and reviewing :) I'm glad that you like the rhyming :) it was my first attempt at using it...

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

it was great the rhyming was fantastic.
your most welcome

[L.M.Warde]

I loved this. It had a great captivating element, as you read and discover you dive in to the moment. The gradual revelation of heartache was splendidly executed. Very well written! Thank you for posting!

[Katho28]

thank you so much for reading and reviewing!!! :) It means a lot :) I'm glad you loved it. It's all from the heart...

[dianalondon]

A very strong and mesmerizing piece. It was very courageous for you to put of your experiences into this beautifully created poem. It can also be very therapeutic. The rhyming was well done, and the flow of the poem is great as well. I loved reading this, and was very touched by the heartbreaking composition.

[Katho28]

thank you so much for your kind words :) you're right... putting all these experiences in was indeed therapeutic... I'm glad you liked it :))

[Vani Jalagar]

true experiences and emotions,
hovering in your words,
sensitizing readers wits,
"Remember...?" title utterly fits...
Attempt is really awe-inspiring..it doesn't seem that it's been tried for the first time in fact.

[Katho28]

thank you so much :)) before this poem, I've actually written another one called "He told me" but this one is my first attempt to rhyme :)

[DJ]

It can be hard to write in rhyme and can often sound forced, but this flows quite well. The emotion emitted in this piece was powerful, I could feel those feelings alongside you and that is what you want as a poet. You want to drag the reader into your emotion/experience, beautifully penned. You are really finding your feet here, welcome to WC :)

[Katho28]

thank you so much.. i'm glad that it flows quite well. rhyme is quite hard to employ... but I'm slowly learning. thank you for your welcome :)

[DJ]

Keep it up, it is hard at times but you are good at it :)

[Katho28]

Thank you for the encouragement :)

[Lisa Victoria]

Beautiful...heart=wrenching...this poem made me cry.... I really love how you can take an experience and bring it to life for the reader. I felt like I was right there with you from the beginning to the end, and by the way....his loss hun:) Well done and BRAVO!!!

[Katho28]

thank you so much for your review :) your words are inspiring...

[Riding the Rainbow]

OMG!
This story made me cry, hun!
It's so profound and strong!
You made an amazing job, my friend!

[Katho28]

Thank you so much!! It's all from the heart...

[Tom]

Excellent indeed, rhyme and flow all read naturally and another poem which seems to come from the soul!

Super poem well done again !

[Katho28]

Thank you so much Tom :) It indeed it did come from the soul...