Just kidding, that's not all of my review. It's a well-penned poem, and I like the way you build up the tension throughout it over what the package contains. The curiosity and apprehension were tangible, and I actually rather like how the ending falls flat. It highlights the disappointment of the subject at finding nothing after all of that apprehension and effort.
The only flaw I saw in this was that I think you meant mesmerizing, not memorizing. Great work, it's awesome to see new writing from you Kate.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Ackkk thanks Johnny. I cant believe I let that sneak by me!
lovely writing...you represent two shades of mind state i.e curiosity and disappointment very well...overall well structured and beautiful poem...nicely penned :)
lovely writing...you represent two shades of mind state i.e curiosity and disappointment very well...overall well structured and beautiful poem...nicely penned :)
lovely writing...you represent two shades of mind state i.e curiosity and disappointment very well...overall well structured and beautiful poem...nicely penned :)
Nice twist on this one! I like you're continued theme and admonition..............Open it!..............good stuff! Thanks for sharing and as you are changing the world............Keep Writing ;)
Just kidding, that's not all of my review. It's a well-penned poem, and I like the way you build up the tension throughout it over what the package contains. The curiosity and apprehension were tangible, and I actually rather like how the ending falls flat. It highlights the disappointment of the subject at finding nothing after all of that apprehension and effort.
The only flaw I saw in this was that I think you meant mesmerizing, not memorizing. Great work, it's awesome to see new writing from you Kate.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Ackkk thanks Johnny. I cant believe I let that sneak by me!
I thought I would find a gift towards the end. Something meaningful or important to you, the author. Then I thought, oh my goodness is it a candy bar. I am all for it. Then to find that literally, curiosity killed the cat. Well done!