A Different Version of Crash Into Me

Crash Into Me, dmb

He whispers in her ear,

"Wake up. Come alive."

The world is waiting for you.

It's calling your name.

The fork in the road is asking you

To choose between now and forever.

Set down those hesitations

And pick up your guitar and

Sing a love song, a beautiful

Love song with broken Jazz chords.

The longer you stubbornly  plant  your feet

The deeper they sink into the soil.

Pick them up, run away, and into the arms

Of a happily-ever-after sort of day.

Risk a little something to

Gain a little something more.

Today is the perfect day to start to rewrite

The story, the story with a better ending.

Be honest with yourself and tell yourself

That the world can handle the truth.

Be the truth and live the truth

And come to know that the higher you jump

The greater your wings spread.

You will learn the art of giving in

And the art of putting the broken pieces

Back together again.

Close your eyes and strum a slow song;

Sing a humming sort of song to the world.

Author's Note

Work in progress, so comments are more than welcome.

Reviews

[RAWR!]

ah so cool
"Love song with broken Jazz chords."
i can hear it in my head

[Orlando Murcia]

Very nice piece of work
I was glad that I stopped by your page

It was awesome!!
Thank you for sharing

Orlando M

[Leap]

Whether a work it progress or not...one of my new favorites. As a whole it's great but you've got some fantastic individual lines which are pieces that could stand alone. That is a quality worth keeping.
"The fork in the road is asking you/To choose between now and forever"
"Today is the perfect day to start to rewrite/The story, the story with a better ending"
"You will learn the art of giving in/And the art of putting the broken pieces/Back together again."
"Close your eyes and strum a slow song; Sing a humming sort of song to the world."
--Do you play guitar? If so I'm even more impressed with you.

[Vitamin A]

This is such a unique idea, I really enjoy all that you have written. You seem to capture the same emotions as the actual song, as well as the lyrical feel. I am looking forward to reading more of this.

[DavidRyan]

Definitely beautiful. I was reading this and you feel weightless the entire time....almost like a dream...I know that sounds cliche but I'm a guy and that's the only way I could describe how I felt while reading this. I think it's really strong....an amazing rough draft, for sure. Keep up the good work, dear. It's nice to hear from you once in a while. Hope all is well and good luck with this piece.