The Aftermath

Drink deep in the cave of wonders

For those who seek eternity 

May have forever 

Midnights majestic

Across the fire light 

Can sing the sirens to your doom 

The fear of the unknown 

In the deep colossal depths 

Of rock and sand 

Thoughts of hidden secrets 

Lie close at hand 

Forged from the ashes of 

Your darkest nightmare 

Calls the witch hounds 

Of the Ancient times 

Who ruled the lands 

The cave is waiting 

For those who choose to 

Venture into its uncharted path 

What will you find 

But the secrets of 

Your own destiny 

Leaving the remnants of

The Aftermath 

Reviews

[DoormanDan]

I enjoyed the style with which you wrote this piece a good bit. You definitely have lots of imagery here that fits in perfectly with the theme you've given this. My only recommendation is too make sure that you're double checking how one line expands from the previous line and leads into the next. The fragmented approach to this piece works some of the time, but other times, it's makes temporarily makes me lose track of what you're trying to say.

That being said, you've done just about everything else right here. The whimsically somber atmosphere here is definitely a nice touch. Keep on writing, and always aim to better yourself, and you could become a top tier writer someday! :) :) :) :)

[Kate Henderson]

Haha thank you for your review! much appreciated. I doubt I will become a top tier writer as I just write for fun and do not take it seriously. But thank you for taking the time to give me constructive critique. :)

[DoormanDan]

You never know. Sometimes, great things start out by a person "just doing it for fun". Anyway, you're welcome. :)

[Kate Henderson]

Thank you! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this poem and I agree. We decide our journey. Good or bad. Our worst regret is. Never attempting things we wanted to accomplish. Thank you Kate for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Kate Henderson]

Thank you Coyote! Glad you enjoyed :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy and you are welcome Kate.

[Priyanshi]

THe last lines are really wonderful..not only that, even the whole poem is good...keep on writing , dear.

[Kate Henderson]

Aww! thank you. It means a lot :)

[zaisham9393]

But the secrets of
Your own destiny
Leaving the remnants of
The Aftermath

My favorite lines.
Loved the poem.Thank you for sharing.

[Kate Henderson]

Thank you for reading :) Glad you enjoyed

[Farhan Shaikh]

In the deep colossal depths 
Of rock and sand 
Thoughts of hidden secrets 
Lie close at hand ..
Love the lines above..
Wonderful poem..

[Kate Henderson]

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed :)