Iridescent Eyes

I was climbing up a tree, 

And I saw in front of me, 

A butterfly wing 

That made the birds sing 

I reached out to touch it, 

But couldn't quite reach it, 

So I jumped out to grab it, 

And in my hand I crushed it 

I fell to the ground, 

With a resounding thudding sound, 

And when I landed in the mote, 

The wing was shoved down my throat

I swallowed hard and it slid right down 

Because of the taste I began to frown

Then I started to float in the sky

And I saw in my reflection 

I had an Iridescent Eye 

Reviews

[Steve L.]

Love this poem! Flows beautifully!! Very original.

[Kate Henderson]

Hey! Thanks for your kind review, very happy you enjoyed my work :)

[Dandelion]

Cute and unpredictable to read. I like the involvement of nature in this write l. Good job!

[Kate Henderson]

Hey! thank you very much for your kind review, really pleased you enjoyed :)

[Joe_VILOT_]

funny as more than I have read for some time
was gonna say something else yet
might not have suited this place and time
I found the part about catching the butterfly
fascinating ;}
remember catching an emerald green dragonfly
glistening motionlessly
in the sunlight
being lucky(an' quick enough)
to catch it
Glad I didn't eat i though
when i let it go it flew away untarnished.
Beautiful!

[Kate Henderson]

Hey! thank you very much for your review, really pleased you enjoyed my poem :) and yes eating a dragonfly wouldn't be very good haha:)

[Joe_VILOT_]

indeed unless your a frog or something other adorable animals yeah i might be sick after mabye?....
:| O) ciao

[TheLastEclipse]

very... sing songy. I enjoy it, as others have said before. It is very cute. It sort of makes me feel empowered. I do not know if that's what you were aiming to do, but that is how I felt. Cheers! 98/100

[Kate Henderson]

Hey! thank you for your review, really pleased you thought it was cute, that is what I was aiming for:)

[TheLastEclipse]

Not to say it wasnt taken seriously! :) i found it very serious

[Kate Henderson]

That's fine, serious or not I'm glad you enjoyed :)

[Blogger]

This is creative and very cute! I like the slight randomness of it.....and i can relate since i still like climbing trees and butterflys.

[Kate Henderson]

Hey! thanks for your review, really pleased you liked it:)

[Blogger]

You are a superstar!

[lindalou]

I enjoyed the imagery of your words. They are whimsical and although fun to read I found myself looking for the metaphors within. Well done! Thank you, keep writing. LL

[Kate Henderson]

Hey, thank you for your review, I'm glad you enjoyed this poem! :)

[audrie]

I thought that this was really cute, soft and fun with a wonderful connection to nature. lovely poem

[Kate Henderson]

Hey, thank you for your review, really pleased you enjoyed it! :)

[audrie]

you're absolutely welcome!

[Patricia]

I love the nature connection and it is has a great rhythm and flows easily. Great ending! :)

[Kate Henderson]

Hey thanks very much for your review, glad you enjoyed! :)

[Patricia]

anytime :)

[Stephen]

--- Emotions --- feelings of majesty --- misery & a pond of art --- that's all I find in the write. This poem's well written in Words --- all verses're marvelously expressed with your fluffy heart --- reflecting the moisten sensations of faith. It's an excellent job!!

[Kate Henderson]

Thank you for your kind review, I am glad you enjoyed this piece.