I Dream...

I dream forever 

Of days to come 

Bonds to be severed 

And tunes I will hum 

I dream always 

Of days long past 

What history says 

And moments that didn't last 

I dream on 

Of days that are now 

Where I belong 

And what I now vow 

I dream in a world 

That no one else can see 

In a reality twirled 

Into fantasy 

I dream of Unicorn, Phoenix and Dragon 

Of lands never seen 

Of bards with flagons 

And adventures waiting for me 

Reviews

[Mark]

Kate… maybe I haven’t read enough of your work (this will be remedied :) but so far I have read nothing dark, just the opposite, your words shine
I get it :)

“I dream on
Of days that are now
Where I belong
And what I now vow “

Your saying our truths, our promises, our purpose can’t be defined by those ideals we held in the past, but must be redefined by what is now, the lessons we’ve learnt, the stories we’ve heard and what we’ve achieved

“I dream of Unicorn, Phoenix and Dragon
Of lands never seen
Of bards with flagons
And adventures waiting for me”

A beautiful way to say “I dream of fantasy”

Thankyou again

[Kate Henderson]

Hey Nevyn thanks for reading and reviewing my work. I completely agree with your analysis of the poem. Thanks

[Lafayette]

Questo è molto finemente fatto ... - This is very finely done... LL

[Kate Henderson]

Hey! thank you for your review, really glad you liked it :)

[The Warrior Poet]

There is a specific voice here that carries throughtout that is, aptly, dreamy. I really like what I think you purposefully did with - I dream [forever, always, on, in, of] I will pass on to you what I have learned - "Be UNIQUE - be YOU", if you don't really dream of "Bards with flagons" then it shouldn't be in here. If I may suggest, please look at the following:

*The interrupted rhythm at line 8 - it really "wakes" the reader up and you do want the reader to dream with you right?

*Now, now vow... I would refine as the repetition disrupts the dream. You've done a great job creating a mood. Dont kill the mood.

*I suggest you make the ending more personal. "adventures waiting for me" is very generic. You end this as if the season was cancelled. Make it more memorable.

[Kate Henderson]

Hey thanks for your review, much appreciated :)

[Misery]

What dreams may come....
If only all of life could be so dreamy. Sweetest of dreams, dear poet.

[Kate Henderson]

I am glad you enjoyed this piece, Misery. Thank you for reviewing :)