Waiting for you

If I were a sorceress, I could spell you to be mine.

If I were a clock I could trap you in time.

We'd be forever and you could never leave,

But I'd never be really, truly feel happy.

Passion can't be forced, feelings can't be made.

I cannot take you'r heart, even if I prayed.

I can't win you'r heart by lies and deceiving,

I can't force you to feel what I'm feeling.

Maybe one day I'll have a change in luck.

Until then I am the one whose stuck.

I'll try to forget you, I'll try to move on,

I always fail, to me you're the one.

Until the day you see me and maybe feel the same.

I'll hold my emotions back, I'll keep them tame.

When you are ready I'll be here waiting.

Ready for you, I'm for the taking.

Then you will see how good I can be.

And you might even find yourself falling for me.

 

Reviews

[Jordan's Back]

If I were a sorceress, I could spell you to be mine.
If I were a clock I could trap you in time.
We'd be forever and you could never leave,
But I'd never be really, truly feel happy.


Epic........................

[Mark D]

Thanks, enjoyed it

[Emrick]

(Passion can't be forced, feelings can't be made.
I cannot take you'r heart, even if I prayed.).
i like the line.but i belive prayers makes impossible things be possible.

[Hiddenfire]

I like it's simplicity it's direct yet soft approach. I don't have anything to suggest as far as edits or the like, so thank you for the read I found it fun.

[BJ "Bunneh3000" Brown]

I definitely feel like you should come back to this one. The emotion you tap into is raw and relatable. The style is simple yet it manages to relay the emotion in a genuine way. Maybe you'll edit this one and make it longer???? Please ?! Lol

[Asb]

sweet and tender...:)
full of hope
lovely write :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like how you begin the poem. Would be nice to have some kind of control. I like the feel and the desire in the poem.
"I'll try to forget you, I'll try to move on,
I always fail, to me you're the one."
Sometime being in the right place can lead to happiness. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote