Kat

Some mad imagery and abstract bits.

Once-upon-a-times and happily-ever-afters

Poisoned my childhood dreams and they

Mutated into delusions, a dark dream and a handful

Of pins. I tried to escape you,

But you tangled your threads of obsession into

The delicate reel of my paper-thin persona.

 

A rusted razor-blade, some scars

All stitched up with masking tape and

Protective lies.

The truth would let you slip in

To my world, through the wounds I hid from you.

Tangled in me, two minds entwined, wire and coarse

Black thread.

 

I am dead

On the inside, but you say it's just a phase.

Part-manic but still desperately

Starving, trying to be like your fantasies

Of slim and scarless, heartless women.

I see you in my starless eyes.

You hurt me, but you're still

The face of christ to me.

Reviews

[KeeD]

Hey my friend CREEPER, asked me to check out your stuff, said it was my kind of writing and he couldn't be more right. This is brilliant, I'm captivated by the way you've written this piece. "Mutated into delusions, a dark dream and a handful of pins." First of all not only does this ease of the tongue when I mouth it out but it sounds beautiful, like perfection. "But you tangled your threads of obsession into the delicate reel of my paper-think persona" The flow is effortless and by now i'm pulled in to read more. "Tangled in me, two minds entwined, wire and coarse Black thread, I am dead" each word has such impact, sending shivers up the spine, it's like the longest walk towards the gallows, the reader just wants to savor every moment, every word. The ending "I see you in my starless eyes. You hurt me, but you're still The face of Christ to me." was brilliant, It does have a sacrilegious drive to it as the face of Christ is mean to be pure and righteous, but compared here to a sinner. I'm so honored to read your work, Great job! 100/100 #subscribes # favorited

[KatDarkness]

Thank you so much! :)

[Mark Anthony Games (Hum..]

Review for Change the World Comp.

Superb word play. "Part-manic but still desperately, Starving, trying to be like your fantasies Of slim and scarless, heartless women." You paint a picture in a very effective way. The story is cast with the perfect choice of words and structure. Very well balanced meaning that the emotion does not take over, this keeps the power and impact stable. Great work