Silence

“There are times when silence has the loudest voice” - Leroy Brownlow

tick, tick, tick

measured beats of heart throbs

breathe in

breathe out

 

silence

 

swoosh, swoosh, swoosh

blood pulsing in ears

it has a voice

speak softly

 

whisper

 

splish, splish, splish

raindrops splattering

on windowpanes

drink thirstily

 

weep

 

tick, tick, tick

clock is marching time

breathe in

breathe out

 

silence

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

feel free - not sure if this one works or not. was painful to draw out of me....

Reviews

[EMF]

It works. Belive me it works. I am transfixed by it. As I'm writing I'm going back and rereading. I'm gettign something new every time. Maybe I'm reading too much into it, but you have captured life and mortality better than most could. You also spark off ideas of lonliness and isoaltion. Wonderful work Kat. Simply that.

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a good way to talk about time. Time has an ebb and flow. It speaks to us of different things. You have captured that thought quite clearly.

[Raya Avans]

It was very. quiet.. (some things more sense in my mind but I can never put it into words that make sense to others! so I apologize if you don't understand) Basically.. It works. :) it is very beautiful.. well done

~ rae

[Caitlin Lea]

Very interesting. I like the parallel-ish lines at the beginning and end-- they give the feeling of going full circle. I think the "sound words" work nicely to create images and sounds in your head. This is a good length, too-- this style would get tedious if it were too long.

[Forest Green]

Mellow rain and the marching of time are a nice blend in this poem. Very compelling write...

Steel

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Silence can be a your worst enemy in moments of pain... your wording is so simple and yet packs quite a punch in describing moments of being alone and hurting.

[Jeremy Baker]

As is often the case, the fewer the words, the deeper the meaning and the greater their impact. You allow the reader time to take in the words, feel them, almost touch them, then drift away on a journey with them. Magical writing.

[Lily Mae]

I felt as though I was walking within the poem and picture combined. You have a creative beauty here..xo

[Larry Dyson]

hmm clock is marking time?...maybe? other wise I like the subtlty of it...few words deep meanings..

[LadyKarissa]

Nicely penned Kate. Please read some of my poems. Most of them are sad as I can't really write in happy poems with everyone I have loss and loved in such a small period of time. Lucie