Silence

“There are times when silence has the loudest voice” - Leroy Brownlow

tick, tick, tick

measured beats of heart throbs

breathe in

breathe out

 

silence

 

swoosh, swoosh, swoosh

blood pulsing in ears

it has a voice

speak softly

 

whisper

 

splish, splish, splish

raindrops splattering

on windowpanes

drink thirstily

 

weep

 

tick, tick, tick

clock is marching time

breathe in

breathe out

 

silence

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

feel free - not sure if this one works or not. was painful to draw out of me....

Reviews

[EMF]

It works. Belive me it works. I am transfixed by it. As I'm writing I'm going back and rereading. I'm gettign something new every time. Maybe I'm reading too much into it, but you have captured life and mortality better than most could. You also spark off ideas of lonliness and isoaltion. Wonderful work Kat. Simply that.

[WhiteWillow]

Such a soothing, thought-provking piece. Even quiet moments during the day are filled with deafening sounds. Loved it!!

[Inyourshadow]

Love the raindrop stanza was enjoying this sense last night, so relaxing for some so painful for others, trapped in ones home alone with only the heart and the natural sounds to keep us company. Loss pain and realisation wrapped up well in the sound of silence. keep em' coming

[Kid Kirby]

It works very well, Kat. It has been a lonely stretch of rainy days here and your poem seemed to illustrate how rain can amplify a sense of loss. I like the transition from 'silence - whisper - weep - silence.' Thanks for sharing it.

[Ronn Michael Salinas]

when the other end's silence, all it takes is a shrug

[I am Nelly]

It works very well indeed, it draws you in and you find something else in it each time you read it. Superb.

[Nobody.]

love it. has a burroughsian tone to it. and it taps, taps, taps on that dark mysterious door in the corner of the mind....you know, the one behind which we all hide the things we know, but don't want to know.

love it.

[Crow]

I sense the seconds stop for no man. Sll is but a single point in time, quickly replaced by another.

Inspiring, as well as refreshing!

[Chris Taylor]

I love this poem. I like how you made the reader wait a bit to read on by you hesitating style of the poem's construction. It definitely built the tension I am sure you were looking for. Great job. Enjoyed it very much.

[STAR CHILD]

oh i like this so much

[Chris]

sometimes Kat - we just FEEL our "edges"...