Pieces

The path is littered with pieces of me…

Of you…

Us.

Trampled

Smashed

Thrown against the wall.

Shattered dreams.

Broken wills.

 

Our blood is oozing from lacerations…

Buried deep…

Scars.

Wounded

Howling

Branded into our skin.

Roasted flesh.

Peeling layers.

 

We’re fighting to the last breath…

Claws bared…

Wicked.

Slicing

Tearing

Screaming banshee whoops.

Piercing eyes.

Shredding hearts.

 

Whimpers eke from drooping lips…

Sighs cried…

Tender.

Cradled

Loving

Delicious slumber.

Author's Note

Feel free

Image - LUIS ARROYO

Reviews

[Inyourshadow]

The last stanza kind of gives this piece a sensual feel with the whispers eke from drooping lips and the last line delicious slumber. Sorry but I often read too deep lol. Loved the imagery of the entire piece, such depth and perception of actions and reactions. Keep em' coming

[Zachary_James]

i love your use of words, that you used in this poem. You created such an interesting image in my mind. Very good write.

[DONALD EISSLER]

kat kat what am i going to do with you I know read even more of what you write ...yea!! on this one its so so delicate they way you expressed yourself HEHEHEHE ... don't want you to get mad at me i can just imagine the symbolism you would use when writing about me ..and they would be quite true tooo
tk

[LittleMissSunshine :)]

Scars.
Wounded
Howling
Branded into our skin
I wasn't exactly sure how howling fit into this stanza, I thought it would have been more appropriately placed in maybe the 3rd stanza.

See, I always love a good mysterious piece, and you've accomplished this quite well.
If I had written this piece, I might have provided snatches of a story in every stanza, but that's just me. :) This is very well written. :)

[Poetic Beauty]

The hurt is tangible in this piece. When we soulfully hurt many times we only want to sleep so that dreams can carry us away into a new world where the pain isn't there. This is very descriptive and can be felt deep inside.

[EMF]

Wonderfully dark, angry and resentful. A cracking rant, perfectly handled against a perpatrator. Faultless.