I'll Be Made Stronger

inspiratinal poem for those who feel down because of conflicts with the closed ones .

When I'll go through pain 

And need someone

'They' will heal my wounds

Filling it with love 

Protecting it with care

Standing besides me 

Holding my hands

And I'll be feeling stonger

I shall be made stronger 

Even, when the dawn comes

And I'm left all alone

In the midst of pain and sadness

Allowing me to get up on my own

Dragging myself where the 

canopy of light will fall over me

Making me feel the contentment

And letting the time heal 

All my wounds.

I'll be made stronger 

Discovering myself 

Building myself to rise higher

And strengthening my inner self 

To let me not wait 

But move ahead alone

I will be made stronger.

Author's Note

please write ur reviews for how u felt after reading this, how effective it was and wat improvement and error is required to be amended?

Reviews

[ImSJ]

Karmin, I am reluctant to say what I think about this effort but it is clear to me that the speaker has a strong message to convey. Does the speaker mean to say that when they WILL go through pain (not have gone) and anticipate (WILL be made) acquiring a moral strength from this future trauma?

In the first stanza you refer to 'They'. What does the punctuation indicate? Do the words it in lines 4 and 5 refer to wounds in line three? If so wouldn't them be more appropriate? Buona fortuna, Karmin!

If you ask me how I felt after reading this I would have to say that I believe the speaker to have a very pessimistic view of the future yet they still believe that it will be something which will make them (with no prior evidence) a better person.

I realize this assessment is quite harsh but I believe that the message, if it can be untangled, is a good subject for a poem. I hope you will keep working on this.

[Karmin]

Thanks a lot ImSJ for your honest comments.
'they' refer to the people in our life who usually stand by us when we r in pain.
And pessimistic view comes when you go thru certan things and most of the time it is what i express.
i ll keep on working. :)

[ImSJ]

First let me say it's just SJ (I'm SJ). Second, everybody, and I mean everybody, is in pain at some time or another. Most of the poets on here are walking around with crushed hearts, mangled souls or beaten down egos. The trick is to make it work for you as a writer. I find that the writing is always better if the emotional trauma is tempered by a detached view of it where the writer can step away and cooly evaluate the content and form of the work. Often it needs a bit of time to gain such a perspective.