Trophy

Days can go by and years might pass 

but your name is all I will ever have 

It's deep in my skin 

pierced in my mind 

the guy that took my innocence 

you sat and just watched me cry 

as naive as I was 

you have all of me 

you took the one thing I had

as I bled on your sheets 

as I laid on your bed 

replayed the lies that you said 

I knew this was not love 

cause you left me for dead 

you preyed on a soul 

that was already cracked

cracked trophy I was

I mean that is what you said 

You said I was a trophy now you said you thought with the wrong head 

yea just to take what you wanted 

you took what you can 

Oh you got the prize 

the trophy 

you laughed with your friend 

and now you're back with her 

now you sit on her bed

you tell her you love her 

you tell her it's her 

but does she know that you told me 

it was never her 

that you said it was over 

that you said it was fake 

how you lied on her name 

just to fed off your prey 

it worked 

yes it worked 

cause you left me for dead 

with nothing left but your name 

stamped on my head 

Author's Note

Grammar is not good, i need feedback??

Reviews

[terry smith]

...no I think it is good...what I do is read it to myself & see if it sounds like I would say it..then it is fine :D

[EdwardRaimes]

It is probably good? I was looking for a story, not a poem. I would not have opened if I had known it was a poem.

Not because poems are bad! But I never get poems... I think it is like being tone deaf, it just does not translate into my brain-language very well.

[Pink Pastel]

Wow girl i can feel your pain this is really good

[Echoes of Eros]

The cutting words flow with so much blood and tears. Love is meant to heal us, to make us whole, and you show how false loving completely rips us to pieces. You speak this pain so powerfully that it aches to read. xo

[Kevin Pearson]

Good job, your words has a lot of pain in them.

[rose loya]

I felt your pain, you write well. You'll only get to be a better writer..not that you need to be though, you're really good right now.

Much love, xo Rose

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Powerful write, but well penned.
Keep writing! Tyfs!

[Inject Positivity]

Strong emotions, feeling of a person who has been the victim of betrayal and lies... I can feel the sadness and the pain of the writer... You did really well to express the feelings here... Very strong write... I believe many people can relate to this...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Sbwats]

It was raw, I liked it. Minor grammar, maybe spelling, and that's only if I read in wrong tense of the word. Question, Was she raped or just conned out of her virginity?

[Kari Kush]

she was conned out of her virginity.. but thank you very much.

[Stan]

Kari, I liked your writing.. I found it very sad...if that was your intent.. you did succeed!
Keep writing, you will get better by the month, year, decade.

[Kari Kush]

Thank you so much!