E-Blow Job

First there was sex

then cam sex

and then flirt sex

afterwards virtual sex

do we all get vexed

in the subtext

while i'm on the subject

I must object

Am I the object

of your affection

or am I the reflection

of your intentions

do you reckoned

my life that you beckoned

it there a lesson

for this session

I need your attention

Don't text me away

Don't e-mail away

say it to my face

that you dont love me anyway

Your just a fake

like a E-Blow Job

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Suggestions please?

Reviews

[larryb]

No suggestions ...seems you just write what pops into your head which is a good way to go.

[MarcoftheBeast]

"e-blowjob". very entertaining and new to me.=P very great write and powerful chosen words.. great!

[Alessander]

reckoned is past tense, which I think should be present tense (even though the past tense fits the rhyme better). I normally don't suggest a poem to end with a rhyme when it's not there because it might come off too sing-songy or forced, but maybe you should think about ending it with a rhyme. I like the last line, so keep that, which would mean you come up with another prior line to rhyme with "job" which shouldn't be that hard - "slob" "rob" "lob" just off the top of my head. Other than that, I can see now why your 666 lol that number originally referred to the Roman Emperor Nero, who prob would've liked internet blow jobs:)

[Raja]

Hmm, quite interesting it is...

:)

Thank you.

Raja

[Serend1p1ty]

Strange is the first word that comes to mind. Haha.
Then you realise just how true what you're saying is.
Then the sadness of the message of the poem.
I thought it was a good read, great work.
Btw,
"it there a lesson" - I think its a typo. The word "it" doesn't fit here.

Yours truly,
cloud6

[Kelley]

Now that was funny..........!
Like a "E-Blow Job"
Your mind comes up with the weirdest things sometimes.
But I love it!
Great write! Thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[Silvario]

A great piece. I like the fast paced flow and the bluntness of it. Well written. Nicely done. :)

[An owl on the moon]

I like the freedom of expression here that speaks so powerfully to the modern world of technology that is shaping our relationships. Insightful and bittersweet to read...

[bluessadmood]

oh thats so nice..
ha ha ,there was sex then cam sex then flirt sex,ha ha
dont email me me,or send text just say it to my face,that its not love no way
you are fake,ha ha sound like she is so mad at him..
this is very nice but needs some more work on it
for i lost you a little ..
lovely write..

[Last Lying Look]

Hm. Very interesting.
I have no suggestions.
Great write.