Love Thirsty

This peom reflects people who are never loved by anyone.

                                    Love Thirsty

"Don’t stare at me like that I might look like

One but I am not a parasite

I was once young and beautiful now I agree

I look terrible, I have been all over the

World but all in vein in return

I got nothing but pain

I am chilled to the bone as I have been

Walking away from home, touch me

And make me feel alive, trust me

I am not carrying a knife

Just give me your body heat

Oh! My numb feet

Have mercy on me, I am

Going insane,  Help me!!!!!!!

 I am Love thirsty".

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Do let me if you see any improvement in my work this time.

Reviews

[Cynthia]

WOW, I am wordless, that's truly amazing!
However, I don't hope thats what you are in,
everyone will have a chance to be loved wiht.
I totally love, adore your poem!
'Oh! My numb feet
Have mercy on me, I am
Going insane, Help me!!!!!!!
I am Love thirsty".'
I am totally in love with these lines!

'I was once young and beautiful now I agree, I look terrible'

Oh never say that my dear friend. You are a brilliant woman who was or still is a lawyer and you won a National award for a book on children. You are truly a bright woman and still very beautiful, in body and your heart.

[deeps]

Oh! My numb feet
Have mercy on me, I am
Going insane, Help me!!!!!!!
I am Love thirsty".

I love these lines here, this is amazing.
I can feel the emotion pour out.

[Matthew Kult]

Well written. It was an excellent read and look forward to more.

[emmajoy]

A cry for love is never wrong, whatever the person, he or she deserves the warmth of another being and, deserves to be loved

Your words are a near plea and beautifully put: 'Have mercy on me, I am Going insane, Help me!!!!!!! I am Love thirsty". Those words are raw but powerful.

[HorrorMaster]

very good work. It's improvement on the way the poem should be.

[SJ]

Wow this is really good! Like someone 'Silent Scream' said I would have made it a little londer and added some more detail although your message is really clear and you give the reader a lot to think about with such a short poem.

Keep writing!

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"I got nothing but pain
I am chilled to the bone as I have been
Walking away from home, touch me
And make me feel alive, trust me
I am not carrying a knife
Just give me your body heat"
{WOW--beautiful writing!!!}
i love this poem!!!

james:-)

[A. K. MAXIMILIEN]

Love thirsty.. aren't we all?

[Dream Weaver]

Cries for intense longing, for something you may
never find. For beauty only runs skin deep. A lost
soul who's heart still beats. Nicely done, I just would
have made this a little longer to give more detail.
Overall still a good piece.