Translation

 

I wonder if someone were to translate my poetry

Into a song would it be as beautiful and sweet

As the sounds I hear

When my favorite song is played

On the stereo

I wonder if it would reach

People that I couldn’t dream of

Touch them

The way

My husband slides his hands over the silhouette of my body

Touch them

The way

You hold your first born child

To your heart

Yes!

If only I could make poetry like that

 

Reviews

[The DuchessPoet]

You have a way...
A way of using words to your advantage in such "a way" that it expresses depth and meaning!
Because you've become masterful with "your way" it doesn't take stanza after stanza to illuminate your intent...

I like what you do but more importantly I love the "way" you give it!

Very well done!

The Duchess...

[Emily]

Wonderful poem and an excellent (though difficult!) question. I think you've captured what a lot of poets ( and song writers, as they are poets too) strive for. Very well done.

[The Purple Kazoo]

awesome poem. i've read and tried to write a lot of poems on poetry, and i think this is among the best. it describes real-life everyday poetry, not some romanticised version only written by a select few. this seems like it's more about free-verse than formatted, and i think that's a great thing. thank you for that. i can never write a formatted poem and make it sound good, so i'm glad that someone is writing good things about free verse and not mentioning formats. i mean, i know that you don't actually mention 'free verse' anywhere in the poem, but it just seems like it. to me.
anyhow, i would add a line break after the "Yes!" in the last line; it just seems like it should get more emphasis than it has. other than that...great write!!

[Michael]

Hi O-

You are really on to something with this one. It has a wonderful message about poetry and its reaching out. I do see two little things you might look at. "Some one" in the first line might be better as "someone" and I think you left "would" out of the second like after "song".

Very nice job!